Nice freeform poem Guybrush, quite vivid, and clearly shows emotion.
As for lgm, I have to be honest and say that it has problems. If it were lyrics for a song, or some kind of spoken poem, it might be okay, but there are problems with flow, odd combinations of stressed sylables as well as sylables per line, and finally the line breaks are odd. Like what does being "incredibly dumb" have to with mean and visious? and to flow better, try terribly instead. The second stanza also seems to not fit with the rest. And finally, unfortunately totally does not fit with the simplisity of the rest of poem, I'd try to find another word or reword the last line. But again, if this were spoken rather than written, all those things might work out depending on how you extended or held on to certain words. Written though, it just doesn't read well.