Crit this track, please

Started by djres, Thu 06/12/2007 10:26:09

Previous topic - Next topic

djres

It's the first track I've done yet to break the five minute mark.  It's called "Robot Style."

http://www.mediafire.com/?db0qyht15yc

As usual please be brutally honest.  Thanks!

djres

Bump!

Seriously guys, is it bad?  For some reason I am still kind of liking this track, but I need some outside opinions.  No need to spare my feelings, just let me know your reaction.

Thanks!

Blackthorne

I find it boring, and the sound-effects get really annoying after a while.  I mean, really, it's five minutes of meandering.  If I was high on X, I'd still get bored and go fly kites.

I'd say reduce the time, and stop the repetive sound effects - and work on more orchestration.  Good luck!


Bt


-----------------------------------
"Enjoy Every Sandwich" - Warren Zevon

http://www.infamous-quests.com

vertigoaddict

around 00:34 things start to get a little interesting, cut it to  at least 15 seconds. The human mind is not so patient.

00:48, electric guitar comes in. Okay.

01:05 loud sound effect, at first okay but starts to get annoying and hurt my ears actually...just cut that out.

01:47 things go a little silent. (What? this only works if you build up the tension first...wait, that annoying sound effect WAS the tension (I don't know what it's called so I call it tension).

01:55 you could have ended it here.

02:01 okay...get's louder and drums que again? No bad idea. The tune was just a series of repettitive sounds, YOU CAN'T DO tHIS TO ME!

02:01 drums que, sounds better but you should have done this earlier.

02:13 is that harmonica? Seems a little unecessary and if you really wanted to use it...it felt a few seconds late.

2:32 oh crickets? oh again with the silent thing, you can't use it twice,(well, you can but...) it sucks. cut it out.

Okay, After that I felt like I've wasted my time. But my 'good crittique' is:

*I like the bagpipes in the background, if you know how, you can use it to your advantage in the 'silent' parts.

*It reminds me of Pandemonium 2 a little bit. Perhaps you should research that game's music. (of course their style is a lttle more ethnic)

I guess thats it, and yes I doubble what BlackThorne said- Work on more ochestration!

djres

Hey thanks guys!  Much obliged for the feedback, I think I'll edit this one a bit now :-[

djres

#5
http://www.mediafire.com/?2gfroexzj3r

Remix!  Ok, so I tried to make it a little more listenable this time.  But what can I say, I guess I just like annoying sounds.

vertigoaddict

The last track had bagpipes which reminds me of the irish....this remix reminds me of the british for some reason must be those horns and for some reason I see images of 'Doctor Who'.

It's better I'll tell you that; there's a little bit of 'drunk' in there too but I don't mind that.

SMF spam blocked by CleanTalk