Work in progress - A tune

Pet Terry · Sat 20/11/2004 13:34:57

Here's a short piece of this tune I'm working on at the moment. I'm rather satisfied with it, but one thing bugs me big time. The strings. I feel the chords are all wrong. Any comments appreciated, but especially I'd like comments on the strings.

Download here.

EDIT: Ah, now when listening to this tune with speakers, some instruments appear to be too loud. Oh well, I will fix it after I get some comments on it.

Damien · Sat 20/11/2004 13:52:43

Because of my bad english, I didn't know how to explain this, so here's a mid with strings only:

D_Harbor_Hlp.mid

0:00 - 0:14 - Your version of the strings,
0:18 - 0:34 - My version with one changed note at the end.

Vel · Sun 21/11/2004 09:13:23

Damien, you shifted the strings an octave down.

However, I think that the tune needs either softer(slower) strings or sharper ones - thats somewhere inbetween.

Pet Terry · Sun 21/11/2004 11:02:35

Actually, the strings go like this: Blammo.

The first part is like in the original song, the second part with Damien's edit.

Also, people people! More comments!

Damien · Sun 21/11/2004 12:25:46

QuoteDamien, you shifted the strings an octave down.

I know it wasn't exact, it was just a quick example.

And Pete, I like the tune. Maybe you could add some more variations to the bass line but it's ok as it is.

Oz · Sun 21/11/2004 13:01:51

Nice work Petteri. I love the dub style drums.

Squinky · Sun 21/11/2004 15:44:01

Holy Crap, your getting good petteri! Good stuff...

Ghormak · Sun 21/11/2004 19:31:41

I like the composition. Not much I can say about that, the strings sound fine to me.

Quotewhen listening to this tune with speakers, some instruments appear to be too loud

This, however, I agree with. The piano is a bit too loud, and listening with headphones it feels like it's way too panned to the left. Try centering it a little, or put a little echo of it in the right channel or something to make it a bit richer.

Pet Terry · Sun 21/11/2004 19:42:47

Cheerios fellas. Here's an updated version, Download here.

However, in part starting at 00:32 I'm planning to make it change more so it doesn't get too repetitive. Also, I'm planning to add sound of waves on the background, as in Pleurghburg. I tried it and I think it sounds good. And after all, the tune will be played in a scene with sea in it.