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#41
Trigger Warning: Torture, childhood trauma, swearing

The Road to Hell

Spoiler

"Hello, Hank."

Hank's chair rattled to a stop in the middle of the cell, his wrists and ankles bound by velcro to its arms and legs. Sweat beaded on his brow in anticipation of what was to come. Or maybe he was just hot—it was hard to tell in Hell.

"Jesu—" Orwell began as he read through Hank's rap sheet before realizing where he was. He glanced furtively above the wall of the cubicle cell to see whether his boss had noticed his slip up. The giant devil was frowning in another direction, giving him hope.

Orwell swallowed and changed tack. "I mean, shit Hank, any one of these things would get you sent to Hell. Did you really rob your own grandmother?"

Hank stared blankly ahead.

Orwell sighed. This was typical behaviour for sinners who passed through his station. The silence was a defence-mechanism. By not acknowledging guilt, they could mentally externalize their fate. How many sinners had passed through the gates of Hell, clinging to the tenuous belief that their eternal punishment was somehow someone else's fault? Orwell shook his head, for one of the items on his job description was to disavow them of this notion.

"Broke your girlfriend's nose?" Orwell continued, enumerating the items. "Yanked your dog's tail off? Drove drunk and got into an accident that put your stepson into a coma? Hank, I gotta tell you, I've seen a lot of borderline cases and you're not one of them. You're one genuine douche-bag who genuinely deserves everything you get."

Hank spat, the spittle sizzling on the hot floor until it was just a crusty scum stain.

Orwell reconsidered his initial take. Maybe Hank wasn't just a typical wanna-be victim? Maybe he had been through the nemesis stations so many times that his conscience had become inured to shame? Orwell sized him up: big guy with scar on his chin, cow skull tattoo on his arm, more hair on his chest and back than on his head. He looked every inch like he had had a tough life, but not like someone who had sat long in the fires of Hell.

"Damn, you're one tough son of a bitch, ain't ya?" Orwell asked.

"Get on with it," was Hank's only reply.

Orwell shrugged. Hank had an eternity ahead of him to be reconciled to the consequences of his life choices. His job was just to help the process along. He reached for the vise-grips.

"My, those sure are some pretty fingernails," Orwell commented, locking the vise-grips onto the littlest nail on Hank's left hand.

"Get on with it," Hank repeated. He seemed neither angry nor resigned, which puzzled Orwell. Was it possible that someone just got so used to bad things happening that they stopped feeling? He supposed there was only one way to find out.

Squinch!

The nail pulled out with a tearing sound that still gave Orwell the shivers. Blood squirted on to the floor, where it bubbled and dried into char. Hank frowned, but he didn't call out or swear or do any of the normal reactions. Instead he leaned towards Orwell and fixed him with a meaningful stare.

"Is that the best you got?" he whispered.

Orwell tried to be philosophical about his job. Whereas Heaven was the carrot that beckoned men to be good, Hell was the stick that threatened them if they were bad. And the stick needed to be wielded by someone, so it might as well be him. Normally his station involved slow torture interspersed with teary confessions and moaning laments. In the end the sinner was bloodied, yes, but the real wounds were of the soul. In this instance, however, the stick would need to be more of a club, and the blood would need to flow and splatter freely. This was the way. Orwell would not say that he enjoyed his work, but in Hank's case he was willing to make an exception. As he hacked and bludgeoned and ripped, Orwell could imagine Hank's victim's baying for more vengeance. There was no punishment easier to dole out than a just one.

In the end Hank didn't even whimper. He never cried out, or gasped, or even winced. He just absorbed the hateful malice like some sort of human sponge. Orwell grunted with exertion as he broke the man's last kneecap with a hammer.

"Losing your knack, Number 23?" the giant devil asked, peering over Orwell's cell wall. "Maybe you should take a break."

Orwell grunted and looked at the empty chair in the corner. He was exhausted, but he knew better than to admit weakness in front of his boss.

"This one's a tough nut to crack," was all he would admit.

"They all break, in the end," the devil said casually. "Next!"

The bloody pulp that used to be Hank was sucked out of the cell. Orwell sighed and turned to look over the new rap sheet before the next sinner arrived. The screech and clatter of some rusty mechanism behind the scenes whorled into motion, and soon another chair rumbled into Orwell's little domain.

"Hello, Krayden."

Orwell looked up and did a double take. Before him sat a boy no older than seven. Something fell out of the bottom of his stomach.

"Who are you?" the boy asked, looking around, confused. He struggled at the velcro that bound his wrists and ankles to the comically large chair.

"That's not important," Orwell said, trying to get a grip. The sweat was up on his forehead now, and he felt a little dizzy on his feet. He desperately turned his attention back to the rap sheet.

"It sure is hot in here," the kid prattled. "You got anything to drink?"

Orwell tried to tune him out. "Holy crap, it says here you stabbed your teacher with scissors!?"

Krayden shrugged sheepishly. "I get angry sometimes."

"No shit? What about ripping out your little sister's hair?"

"She bit me first!"

"Says here you lit your cat on fire?"

"I told him not to walk on my toys!"

Orwell's questioning was getting the boy worked up, which was usually the point of reading out the rap sheet. Maybe he could get away with just a few pinches and the boy would confess all?

"The thing is, Krayden, my job is to make you admit your mistakes, one way or another. Do you see these tools here? They are for little boys who don't tell the truth."

The kid squirmed in the oversized chair. "They made me do it," he said evasively.

Orwell felt his stomach start to reel. People learned early to blame others for their bad choices, it seemed, and now he was going to have to do his job or literally get fired. He picked up the vise-grips and moved towards the boys mouth, reasoning that those baby teeth were probably near to falling out anyway.

"Fuck you!" the kid shrieked in his high-pitched voice, trying to dodge from side to side.

The dodge might have worked, except for the boy's precocious swearing. As the kid tried to close his mouth around the words the vise-grips shot in, and in one fluid motion Orwell ripped out one of the kid's front teeth. Blood dripped out of the boy's mouth, giving him a demonic look as he spouted more obscenities.

"You're a piece of shit! If I ever get out of this chair, I'm going to bite off your nose and piss down the hole!"

Orwell smiled at the empty threat, his stomach settling somewhat. His job was easier when the punishment was just, and this psychotic little git seemed more than deserving of what he was about to receive. Orwell moved the vise-grips down to seize one of the kid's fingernails.

"Hey kid, I bet I know which finger you use the most," he teased.

"Fuck you!"

Orwell yanked and the kid howled as blood splattered onto the cell wall.

"Still a tough guy now?" Orwell asked.

Krayden scratched at the arms of his chair as if he were sharpening his claws. "You just wait til my step-dad catches up with you! He'll wipe his ass with your stupid face!"

"Sounds like a really scary dude," Orwell agreed, going back in with the vise-grips. "But I don't see him here, do you? I know this is a lot of growing up to do all at once, but it's time for you to take responsibility for what you've done. Just you, all alone, with nobody to help and nobody to blame."

Krayden jerked and thrashed and spat out of his bloody mouth. "You just wait. Once he sobers up, he'll be here. He never misses the chance to beat on someone. He's just gotta wake up ... wake up ... c'mon, wake up ..."

Orwell paused. The kid seemed to be slipping out of consciousness, which would blunt the effect of the torture. He'd heard that newly arrived souls could sometimes flit back to their mostly dead bodies, although he'd never seen it himself.

"... Wake up, you big piece of shit ... Mom's going to slit your throat in your sleep when she sees you've been driving drunk again ... c'mon you big hairy dick ... I fucking hate you!"

The creeping feeling of nausea overcame Orwell again. Step-dad ... hairy ... drunk driver ...

"Whatchoo staring at, you dumb shit?" the kid squeaked, returning to his senses.

Orwell tried to swallow, despite the dryness of his mouth. "Is your step-dad named ... Hank?"

"Yeah, you would know Hank. That piece of shit always hung out with loser bullies like you."

Orwell was vaguely aware of the sound of vise-grips clattering to the floor. This kid might well be a psychopathic asshole in-training, but it was hardly his fault. That douche-bag Hank had practically forged his step-son in his own image, before doing him the favour of killing him in a car crash as a drunk driver. Where was the justice in that? What fault could the kid truly admit to, other than being abused and mistreated for as long as he could remember?

"You don't look so well, Number 23," the giant devil commented, peering over the cell-wall. "If you do not wield the stick to punish the sinners, who will?"

Orwell stumbled, catching himself against the wall of the cell and burning his hands in the process. He looked back at the boy, writhing in a mix of anguish and fury. He tried to force himself to bend down, to pick up the vise-grips, but the hurt look behind the child's eyes bore down into his own soul, causing him to collapse and vomit at the thought. No, he couldn't do it. Weeping and barfing in equal measure, he crawled his way to the chair in the corner.

"I'm done," he said, shaking as he heaved himself into the chair. "I'm so done."

The giant devil nodded.

Orwell was vaguely aware of what happened next. Somehow he was transported out of the cell, riding the chair through tunnels that echoed with the screams of the condemned. His stomach reeled as he climbed and dropped, and there was the ever-present sound of rusty metal screeching ominously. He noted that his wrists were now velcroed to the chair, but he had expected no less. He deserved to be on the other side of the torture for a while, after everything he had done. At least now he could hold up his head with dignity, after making at least one decent decision in his pathetic life.

There was the glow of light at the end of the tunnel as the chair slowed up to rattle into a torture cell. Orwell blinked, trying to get his bearings.

Little Krayden was reading his rap sheet, or at least pretending to. The crust of blood still caked his jaw like a devil's goatee. When his squeaky little voice piped up, he sounded like a psychotic tooth-fairy.

"Hello, Orwell."
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#42
I've got an idea, but the devil is in the details.
#43
Well, well, well!  ;-D  Voting is closed, and it seems we have a bit of a tie. I hereby invoke rule 278b of the FWC Constitution granting the contest administrator UNLIMITED POWER in such a scenario.  Buwuhahahahahahahaah! Who shall hold the hem of my cape out of the mud during my triumphal parade?  :-\

While I bask in the golden light of fortune, let us review where we stand:

Mandle - 12 votes
Lorenzo - 12 votes
Stupot - 10 votes
Sinitrena -  10 votes
Rootbound - 6 votes

I want  you to know that I wrote down my own hypothetical votes before reading everyone else's votes and feedback, and will be adding my ten votes to the fray momentarily.  First, as means of further dramatic pause, a little feedback for each of our dear contributors:

@ Mandle
Spoiler
There are many elements of a good story here, but they are hitched all together like a Frankenstein monster.  I felt the dozens of adjectives in your introduction hurt pacing, but then the story got significantly better as the mystery unfolded.  And then it got dark quickly! But then it got light even quicker - I didn't have the sense it was a fun story before the midpoint. Then it got paranormally weird ... I think if you had settled on any one of these tones it would have made for a strong story, but as it stands it felt like we were constantly veering from one atmosphere to the next at breakneck pace.
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@ Rootbound
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The contrast between nocturnal and diurnal animals is clear and well done.  Yes, as a human I feel enfeebled, but night is obviously not the environment I am adapted for - I'm sure the coyote up the tree feels the same I do in the dark. What I'm left wondering, though, is where this comparison is supposed to take me?
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@ Stupot
Spoiler
This poem has a very strong atmosphere. Your narrator flirts with the idea of playing with the forbidden fruit, although instead of fruit it seems to be some kind of perilous pit-of-no-return. I wish you had taken some of that charged atmosphere and added just a bit more meat to the story.
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@ Sinitrena
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This story had more twists than a forest path! The intro was a bit laboured - I found myself indifferent to how long she had travelled by which route - but it did establish the menace of temptation. The first encounter with the prince was fascinating, the second one sinister. I liked how the witch was the good guy.  I question how if they Prince has been trapped for a long time and folk clearly fear the forest for some reason, why did the witch ask if this particular girl was the first?
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@ lorenzo
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A ghoulish story of human sacrifice - oh Martina, you didn't read widely enough in your youth! The ending was a bit easy to see coming, but the writing was beautiful and I really was rooting for gentle Alberto. I was a bit miffed to find the forest itself rather tangential to the story, but otherwise it was a compelling narrative. 
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OK, drumroll time.  Badadadadadadadadadadadadadadadadadada ...

I vote:

Lorezo 3, Sinitrena 3, Mandle 2, Stupot 1, Rootbound 1.

Thus, our final overall scores:

Lorenzo 15
Mandle 14
Sinitrena 13
Stupot 11
Rootbound 7

Thus, lorenzo is our winner! It falls to him to start the next contest (and to walk behind me in my triumphal parade whispering "careful, thou art mortal").  Hope to see you all out again next round!
#44
My apologies for the delay. The contest is now closed and it is voting time. We have a whopping five entries this round, so we're moving to a multi-vote format in order to share the love around.  All voters have 10 votes to share around, no more than 5 per entry. No fractional votes - my tender brain can't handle the maths right now. Votes are to be posted in this thread, preferably along with feedback - we critique because we care.

Here are your entrants:

Mandle with Envy of Heaven
Rootbound with Nocturne
Stupot with The Dark, Dark, Forest
Sinitrena with The Path
Lorenzo with A New Life

Voting deadline is Wednesday November 6, with results to be announced the following day. Good luck to all participants!
#45
The Rumpus Room / Re: Target: Ponch's Avatar
Sun 03/11/2024 02:18:04
I vaguely remember sleeping with ThreeOhFour's nun avatar at a party back in college.  :P

The hockey animation is eerily accurate. Have you been fanboying me from the stands??
#46
We're getting down to the wire, but there's at least two people feeling the crunch so I think a short extension is reasonable.  Deadline extended until Nov 1!
#47
Quote from: Mandle on Sat 19/10/2024 23:24:37Working on something.

This is good. Most potential entrants are merely lost in the dark recesses of their own consciousness.  (nod)

ONE WEEK LEFT!
#48
The Rumpus Room / Re: Target: Ponch's Avatar
Thu 24/10/2024 01:25:06
When I dream of Ponch doing the pee-pee dance, this is what I see.
#49
The Rumpus Room / Re: Target: Ponch's Avatar
Wed 23/10/2024 03:39:49
I get a lot of joy at the thought of Ponch in a cowboy hat travelling through time in a PortaPotty.  :=
#50
Welcome friends!  The last round I hosted was "cozy", but this time I want to get everyone out of their comfort zones. This fortnight we are visiting a place that haunts the subconsciousness; an untamed place full of wild creatures beyond the pale of civilization.  Today we visit...

The Dark Forest



Tradition has it that we have a spooky theme this time of year, but you are welcome to submit any type of story so long as it contains a forest so old and wild that it is beyond the control of humans.  Of course, you are also more than welcome to creep us out with tales of druid sacrifices, witch covens, and sentient trees that strangle the unwary with their roots. :=

As a short story competition, I'm going to limit submissions to a 2000 word count this time around.

Stories are to be submitted by the time it is no longer Wednesday October 30 anywhere in the world.

Good luck to all participants!
#51
Thanks for all the votes, folks!

@Tottel
Spoiler
I liked your non-submission, but then I also like a lot of introspection in my stories. I understood the secret hobby to be yearning for something more than just wasting time away at the bar, with the main "character" actually being the inner voice that keeps saying "we could be so much more than this". I'd say next steps are to watch formatting and verb tenses for clarity (although the formatting might not be your fault, sometimes the forums do weird things). Welcome aboard - hopefully next time we get to vote on your story!  ;-D
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I'll try to get the next comp up and running promptly.
#52
Stupot here to unsave the day!  ;)

Quote from: lorenzo on Fri 11/10/2024 09:06:43By the way, the Marconi surname for a mob boss in 1950s US makes no sense.

Today I learned! I will have to be more careful when picking names in the future. I am sorry for painting the narrow boot of Italy with a wide brush.
#53
My thoughts on this matter are ... secret.  :=
#54
@ Sinitrena
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The little details make this story come alive: the beer gut, the overloud voices of the work buddies in the street, the cat that likes to lick hair gel (ew!).  The hobby was fascinating, and deliciously clandestine.  I was disappointed to learn at the end that Zander was one of the folks who propositioned Andrew - is no one in this world open-minded enough to appreciate art on its own merits without sexualizing the artist? Given the circumstances, I can see why Andy resigned, but this tears at the flaw at the heart of the whole story: given the risks involved (and Andrew clearly appreciates these, given his evasiveness), why would he leave so much to chance and not conceal his identity on stage? This turns what could be a heart-wrenching story of injustice into a well-what-did-you-think-would-happen?

As for your critiques, I 100% agree with them.  Mostly I ran out of time, as per usual, but I also felt that I had achieved my goal: the story was about the secret hobby, which has been entirely revealed by the end.
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My vote goes to Sinitrena, for obvious reasons mentioned by said aforementioned Sinitrena.  :wink:
#55
Quote from: Mandle on Sun 06/10/2024 10:50:45With only two entries this round...

...But what about all the secret entries?  :undecided:
#56
Secrets of the Sunset Society

Spoiler

Muriel tottered over to the sink to start the dishes, manoeuvring her walker around the gauntlet of toys and food spills that her great-grandkids had left on the linoleum.

"Oh, leave it be, Gran," Lindsey chided her, beating her to the counter on legs fifty years younger. "You go relax. Do a puzzle maybe? Or go study your old family history documents."

Muriel squinted through her thick glasses at her granddaughter, then back at the chaos that was her house. Children were running left and right, playing some sort of chasing game that involved shouting at the top of their lungs. She subtly reached behind her ear to turn down the volume of her hearing aid another few notches.

"What was that, dear?" she said, feigning deafness, hoping her granddaughter would take the hint. Why in heaven's name did parents not parent anymore?

"I'll do the wiping up," Lindsey proclaimed in an overloud voice, as if speaking through a very old telephone. Muriel frowned, looking at the pile of dishes on the counter. The possibility that she would have to rewash the dishes after Lindsey's half-assed effort hung heavily in the air, but she doubted she could wrestle the wash cloth from the thirty-year-old without causing a scene.

Muriel nodded, defeated. "I guess I'll go find my knitting," she pouted. She made to move her walker towards the living room, but stepped on some kind of squeak toy and nearly jumped out of her skin.

"Careful, Gran!" Lindsey shouted over her shoulder, all innocent smiles. Muriel was saved from grumbling something uncharitable under her breath by the ring of the phone.

She unslung the portable phone from the holster on her walker.  "Hello?  Muriel speaking," she said in her sing-songiest inflection.

Her great-granddaughter pulled at her skirts, distracting her from the person on the other end of the line, but Muriel pushed her ear into the phone harder, as if she could squeeze her whole body through to escape.

"What's that you say? Bridge at 4 tomorrow? Oh, that'd be lovely, but I'd need a ride. Marilyn can swing by? I thought they took her licence? Oh, I see. You don't say! So be it, then. Four tomorrow. Ta!"

Muriel hung up and stooped down to see what her great-granddaughter wanted. These were the kind of moments she cherished, despite all the distractions. At her age, you had to seize each and every one—you never knew when it could be your last.

"Look, Granny!  Playdoh!"

Muriel shook her head. "Where in heavens did you pull that out from! That's Granny's special sticky-tack!"

It was going to be a long evening.

*   *   *   *   *   *   *

Muriel rolled over to look at the clock and groaned. The sky was dark, her family safely packed off to the commuter suburb they called home. The world was asleep, but her bladder stirred restlessly. Sighing at the futility of ignoring it, she rolled out of bed.

3 AM. She pulled a sweater on against the chill of the morning air. Then a shawl. Then a toque and jacket. She wondered if a scarf and mitts might be overdoing it, but decided to err on the side of caution. A beeping sound through the window told her it was time.

Muriel hobbled out through the lobby and out into the cool of the night. There was Marilyn, perched on her personal mobility device like a biker, complete with black leather jacket. Her old friend somehow revved the electric engine, then winked at her.

"Damn fools to let you back on the road," Muriel tsked cheerfully. She collapsed her walker and hung it on the back of the scooter.

"Don't obscure my turn signal!" Marilyn growled as she flashed a smile from her new dentures. They were Mr. Clean white, flooding the darkness with their brightness.

"Move up," Muriel shooed. "I'm not riding around in your basket like a bit of discounted shopping."

"There's no room," Marilyn said, shaking her head. "You've got to perch on the back. There's a little ledge for your feet and everything."

"We'll bloody tip over with all my weight that far back," Muriel exclaimed.

"I've always wanted to pop a wheely down the freeway," Marilyn told her with impish enthusiasm.  "Now stop your quibbling and hop on. Bridge at four!"

Muriel nodded, thanking her stars she'd had the foresight to bring the mittens. In a trice they were tearing down the street at a heady 10 km/h.

*   *   *   *   *    *   *

4 AM. Marilyn pulled up under the overpass, tearing a skidmark in the loose gravel and chuckling wickedly. Muriel nodded to the gang as she unfolded her portable walker. There was blind Kentucky Jack, twirling his white cane about playfully; and Firebrand Phyllis, an ever-present cigarette dangling from her lipsticked lips despite her ninety years of age. And there, in the shadow of the abutment was their undeclared leader, Alice "Aces" McAddams, flashlight in her mouth, studying some old documents in her elegantly gloved hands.

"Wheels," Phyllis nodded to Marilyn. "Mayhem," she nodded at Muriel.

"Did anyone pack a furnace?" Muriel asked, clapping her hands around her. The windchill of even the moderate speeds of Marilyn's mobility scooter had cut her to the bone.

"What, is this a tea party?" Firebrand asked, flicking the ash from her cigarette into the darkness. "Who brought the scones?"

"Hardy har har," Wheels laughed, giving her old friend a shot in the arm.

"Knock off the foreplay, ladies," Aces called, gesturing for them to gather around. "Wheels, give us a run down of where we stand."

"Dammit, Aces. Let's just get down to the brass tacks," Kentucky Jack grumbled.

"It's your damned dementia that holds us up when the tacks are out!" Aces spat back, although not unkindly. "Wheels, let's hear it!"

Wheels flashed her overwhite smile, blinding everyone except the already-blind man. "We're still working the Marconi file. Jonny 'The Scar' Marconi, mob kingpin back in the fifties, died in prison years ago. Rumour has it he stashed a treasure somewhere under the city, kind of as a nest-egg in case he ever broke out. Something untraceable, like gold or jewels or art - rumours can be flighty things. He was fond of Egyptian history, including the idea of traps around pharaoh's tomb, so we're going to have to watch our step. I assume Aces has another lead, which brings us out to this desolate bit of urban blight."

Muriel nodded along. She'd read up on the Family history as well.

Aces picked up the thread, all business. "I've unearthed a new clue in some correspondence between Marconi and his last surviving grandchild, now long deceased. He hints at the "family jewels" being safe in the old bank vault. It took me a lot of research in the archives, but I think he's literally talking about the Millbank, an old stocking factory with mob connections demolished back in the sixties to make way for—"

"This expressway," Muriel finished, looking around with renewed interest.

"I've secured some schematics from the city that indicate that the freeway was built over a disused network of drainage sewers. There's an outlet just over there, barred up of course. It's my theory that those tunnels tie into the old factory foundations, which was derelict even when Marconi would have stashed the jewels."

"What if this is another wild goose chase?" Old Kentucky asked, pinching Wheels in the buttocks and making her shriek like a schoolgirl. "My memory ain't what it used to be, but I sure as hell remember the old gas works debacle."

"It's true," Aces admitted. "We know Marconi spun a lot of false rumours to protect his treasure, and that his affinity for Egyptology led him to build ingenious booby traps engineered to last for centuries. He was determined that only the worthy should inherit his treasure. We need to stay on our toes down there, people. Understood?"

They all nodded grimly, and then set to their tasks.

In a hot minute Muriel had her "special sticky-tack" wedged into the weakest joints of the drainage tunnel grating. Firebrand gave her a knowing smile.

"Anyone care for a smoke?" the old chimney asked. Everyone dove for cover as she flicked the butt of her cigarette at the substance, blowing the metal cover off like a champagne cork. Then she cackled like a witch over the moon.

"Old Kentucky," Alice said, pointing the blind man in the right direction of the dark drainage tunnel. "Time to put that tactile sense of yours to good use."

"I feel you," the old man joked, his white cane probing into the darkness. "Any of you ladies up for a good time?"

Muriel smiled. "Let's go exploring!"

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#57
I'm just about done, but it still needs some spit and polish.  I'll post it tomorrow, my time, which is today, your time, but still very much October 5th.  ;)
#58
Quote from: Sinitrena on Sun 29/09/2024 06:42:13So secret that not even you know what it will be?  (laugh)  ;)

This was sadly true as of writing.  (wtf)

But no longer!  :=
#59
I've been secretly working on something.  Very secretly...  (wtf)
#60
I don't know...  I think Mrs. Mandle making deductions based on the consistency of lumps of stool left in the family toilet would make for an even more engaging story.  ;-D
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