more screens for doll

[remmies]

Ok I am a newbie and I am making my first ags game, I hope it turns out fine it will be a while before it's done because I plan to make it long, here is how it goes…
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You play as a doll that is alive and you have no family, but you no that someone made you. You have decided to call him creator, you watch as he was making you in a small house you look around through your button eyes, the man does not speak at all and you can not speak yourself yet, but you do here the creator mutter doll at one point, then you wonder if that is your name either way you have decided to refer to yourself as doll but just as your creator finished making you, you here your creator say “there here” then you see many other people burst in and take your creator away they take you separately and lock you in tower it is plain and surrounded by many mechanical objects that all bear a similar resemblance. All that you have to connect you to the outside world is a barred up window as you look out the window you see the angry mob kill your creator by tying him up and dropping him...as many years pass you are forgotten, nobody ever comes near the tower and you are nothing but a lost and forgotten memory you watch all the people below and learn small things about them how they live, survive, and kill each other off mercily. You have tried wearing down the bars for quite sometime now they just won't give away perhaps if they did, you would be able to jump out and put an end to your horrible life, but you decide you must escape, there has to be something you have overlooked all of these years. What happens when you escape, you are discriminated here, will you b discriminated other places? ... All you know is today you escape.
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so basically first you have to escape from the tower then later you go out through many different homes and different types of places looking for a place to accept you, and possibly another one like you, it may sound cheesy but I promise I will make it awesome!
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Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã, "Here is the character you play as"
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Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  "Doll"

Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã, "Ok, this is nowhere done but this is the opening title!"
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Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  Ã,  "Ok, here is the starting off room its is also nowhere done!"

[Pet Terry]

Well, the story sounds really interesting and your character doesn't look too bad, but your writing is annoying to read. I suggest you edit your post with correct use of commas and dots, and also write words as they should be, 'b4', 'becuz' etc. is just annoying.

Other than that, welcome, and hope you'll finish this project.

[remmies]

Well, the story sounds really interesting and your character doesn't look too bad, but your writing is annoying to read. I suggest you edit your post with correct use of commas and dots, and also write words as they should be, 'b4', 'becuz' etc. is just annoying.

Other than that, welcome, and hope you'll finish this project.

Ok, I fixed all the typos if you notice anymore that are worth changing please tell

[Tiki]

remmies,

Don't post much about your game until you've actually gotten a good pantload of work done.  Every week or so, another newb comes by, showing their only screenshot and giving a rough story.  Then, sometimes, they will post incomplete pics.  Here's my advice, Do you see many other [people posting incomplete bgs?  I suggest you get a whole lotta work done on this game, or at least more that this, and then, show us some've your progress.

Eh. the harshness.
- Tiki

[SilverWizard_OTF]

Good luck to your game, remmies!

[Kinoko]

It's an absolutely fantastic concept. Not entirely original, but I just love your "doll" design. Honestly, if I saw that on the cover of a game in a store, I'd buy it in a second.  Am I right in thinking the game itself is called, "Doll"? Even better, if so.

Er, I have to agree with Petteri, that introductory paragraph is VERY hard to read. The story is great, but it needs even more work to make it um.... not annoying to read. You need to break your sentences up more.

I also agree that it's best to do as much work as you can before posting about your game. Try to complete individual rooms before posting shots of them, and don't give away too much info about the game, because it'll be more fun for people to play then

Don't give up though! I love the idea... try to put as much work into making this a good quality game as you can!

[remmies]

  HAHA, thank you! Right now i'm working on the backgrounds and i should be able to post a demo within the next couple of weeks right now i don't have access to ags...kinda sucks.