Rock Travis - Camillia's case

[fox33]

Rock Travis... Detective. Charged of the case of Camilla. A prostitute found dead in a back alley.

Who killed her?
Why?

https://www.adventuregamestudio.co.uk/site/games/game/2634-rock-travis-camilla-s-case/







It's my first game and I'm a bit scared of the reactions. please don't be too hard on me.
Hope you have fun...

[heltenjon]

I've played through it and got two of the endings. Will try to find the third as well.

This a quite good first game. You can certainly draw, so your game looks good. It's first person, meaning no animation this time around, but the game works fine without it. You've written a logical crime story, and the signposting is good enough that the player knows what to do next and when he's finished for the day. Even though the story is sad, like murder mysteries tend to be, I was entertained by it. Well done!

Some things that can be improved: I guess English may not be your first language? The game could benefit from some proofreading. While nothing was difficult to understand, there are numerous errors that somewhat disturb the flow of the game because it breaks the immersion.

The game is silent. (As was my first games, too.) There is music available for free at this very site, so you can easily find some tunes with a noir quality. Sound effects can also be found for free if you don't want to dabble into making your own.

There is some lack of polish. Some hotspots are still named "Hotspot 2" and similar. Ideally, they will have names and give feedback to any type of action the player makes. Likewise, there are locations that doesn't serve a purpose in the story. I don't think you need the bathroom in the apartment or the outside of the police station - when going to the station, the player could just as easily be placed indoors. Last, I'll mention that some locations have exits while others do not. It took me a while to realize that I could use the map on top of the screen to exit any location.

Thanks for the game, and I hope it's the first of many!

[fox33]

Thank you so much for playing my game and make a fair review. Very constructive. I will try for the next game to be one step more "professional". But you are right my first language in not english. I can play guitar but im not sure how it's will sound when recorded. I fix the mistake. And i will maybe try to make a bit of animation. But animation alway be a bit hard for me...

Thank you so much for all.

I will start another project soon.