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Creative Production => Critics' Lounge => Topic started by: Flippy_D on Thu 18/12/2003 21:03:24

Title: A little poem.
Post by: Flippy_D on Thu 18/12/2003 21:03:24
I had one starting line and a subject matter in my head. So I wrote. It may not be very good, but. Meh.

A noose of hot silk,
a dagger of cold cream,
chocolate poison.

But were you to have little,
a wolf in urban kitchens,
how scripts may have changed.

And drugs and drink and sex and violence and we love you Woodstock!
Maybe this was better.

Indulgence is a warm path to death,
but it's scent is misguiding - beguiling and fresh,
and how pretty the butterflies are off the road.

You. Wealth and luxury.
Death, such an irony - was it that you were not satisfied? surely not.
Yet, a troubled thing, brittle cling on reality. And you may leave
and wander to the butterflies, off the path.


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If anyone figures out what the poem is about, I'll be quite happy.
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: Darth Mandarb on Thu 18/12/2003 21:12:04
Michael Jackson.
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: MrColossal on Thu 18/12/2003 21:36:58
Elliot Smith




[i have no idea who he is but people seem sad he died...]
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: Flippy_D on Thu 18/12/2003 21:54:53
What, not who  ;D

If it's any comfort, I don't know him either.
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: MrColossal on Thu 18/12/2003 22:22:06
hehe i think Darth Vader's [LOLOLLL WARD AND JUNE CLEAVER] guess constitutes as a what...

i don't know if you're asking for crit so I won't
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: TheYak on Fri 19/12/2003 11:20:06
It's about the everyday-man's defiance of the massive corporate machine in order to pursue the co-existance of man with goat-yogurt.
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: cpage on Fri 19/12/2003 12:39:46
lol for the whole time i was trying to figure out why someone would right a poem about junk food
Title: Re:A little poem.
Post by: Eggie on Fri 19/12/2003 14:12:39
Mmmmmmn, chocolate poison...