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Title: A random song for critique.
Post by: Calin Leafshade on Sun 13/09/2009 13:50:46
Not AGS related but I thought some people might like to hear my (less serious) music

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8-PfXP5JdBc
Title: Re: A random song for critique.
Post by: Scarab on Sun 13/09/2009 14:21:34
Lol, that line about the wobbly desk is so harsh
Title: Re: A random song for critique.
Post by: Jimbob on Sun 13/09/2009 16:16:24
Haha, like you say on your blog, very Deep Blue Something and a delivery that if you didn't have the lyrics in the video you'd completely miss out on.

My main problem is that there's no real dynamic between the verse and chorus...which after four minutes gets a little bit too much, but some good lines in there, if some do sound a little forced when you're trying to fit all the syllables in :P

You've got a very Ben Gibbard style voice as well (only drowned in reverb ;) ), which for me adds to the amusement... thinking it could make the next Death Cab album...
Title: Re: A random song for critique.
Post by: None on Sun 13/09/2009 21:28:37
 ;D I LOVE YOU... END OF STORY.
Title: Re: A random song for critique.
Post by: Calin Leafshade on Sun 13/09/2009 22:31:46
So.. are we having sex now or later?
Title: Re: A random song for critique.
Post by: Anian on Sun 13/09/2009 22:43:35
...good thing I only asked for a cookie.  ;D

A bit onT: like Jimbob said, a bit of diversion between the chorus and the verses, and maybe talking less directly about some topics just to make it a bit more "deeper"...though I did like the song in general.