Alien- Crit plz

[Indie Boy]

Im starting a new game and the main character is called "Alein" so I'm just wondering does he look like a alien

[veryweirdguy]

.bmp files are a big nono here. You should save your piccys as .jpgs or .pngs, then you can show them on the forums.

Anyway, in answer to your question:

Well, the main question - "Does this look like an alien?" - is of course IMPOSSIBLE to answer as no on knows what an alien looks like, but I'm sure people will indulge you anyway.

My main problem is that he looks a little cliched for a game. Unless this is a comedy, possibly parody game, I would advise coming up with something looking a little more original than a little green man with big black bug-eyes.

That said, I quite like what you have here. You seem to have a humanoid...ic shape about right, and the shading is quite good for the style.

Hope that helps.

[Indie Boy]

Thanks sorry for the .bmp here is a .jpg



I wanted it to look cheesey but i see where you are coming from so i might change the colour


note: credit to Eric "time traveling" MrColossal

[Chicky]

Ever though of giving credit to Eric? It's just his walkcycle example painted green with a elongated head.

I sugest getting a picture to work of from google and base your character on that. It's perfectly alright to use people templates (with permission) but simply changing the colour and putting it into critics seems a little pointless.

[stuh505]

You just got served.

[[Cameron]]

buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurn!

[Las Naranjas]

Eric put the walk cycle there for people to use.

If he was so small minded to demand kudos each time it was used he could lick my wang.

[MrColossal]

Alec, Stuh, that's really unacceptable behaviour.

Chicken, I know they're paint overs of my sprites, he knows they're paint overs, you know and probably a majority of people here know, but I gave them away for free.

He can do whatever he wants good for him. I'm just glad they're helping people. I appreciate you trying stick up for me but it it's alright. Everyone all over the planet has free use of those sprites and if someone tries to steal them THEN we can attack him with all of our ninjas.

But the sprite, to me the eyes look like pits and not eyes. Like there's nothing in there, just holes. A slight shine on the upper part of the eye would work well I think. Good luck with the rest of him and if you can I suggest getting someone to help you on the up walking cycle [if you continue to use my templates] because it looks kinda bad...

p.s. mm orange flavoured wang

[Andail]

hm, as much as it is allright to use them sprites, it would only be polite to tell where they come from. Not just to satisfy Eric personally, but to clarify what you've done yourself and what people should give c&c on.

[Sam.]

just a quick panitover, i tried to make the eyes look more like eyes.

[Indie Boy]

Right I'm just started with ags and I'm rubbish with walk cycles so used one I got from a website. I am going to change it and the picture wasn't my finished character. I only used that just for an idea and to get some pointers on ok. By the way thanks for the light on the eyes Il get straight to it

[Indie Boy]

Here is a better picture

[Erwin_Br]

Hey, that's a nice one. I love that tail. It would be great to let it swing from left to right when you make the walk animation. Keep up the good work!

--Erwin

[Indie Boy]

Yeh I was thinking about the tail moving left and right like you said but if you turned, the tail will dart across, not that smooth.

In better words if you were walking forwards and the tail was on the left and you turned say right the tail would be at the other side because of the animation.

I mite just move it in the middle and have it moving left and right or up and down only on 1 frame on each to solve the problem or just leave it out because I don't think a tail like this has been tackled on ags.

Ps Im crap at explaining things!

[Indie Boy]

This is my first room i just want some crit on how it looks


The circle in the centre is a teleport thing

by the way the brown buttons and lever are meant to be red

The panel stops at the right because a bin is there

[stuh505]

The perspective on the teleport thingy doesn't match the rest of the room.  I can't tell if it's supposed to be indented or outdented, because the lines indiacte that it is outdented, but the lighting indicates that it is indented.

[DragonRose]

Ooo... I quite like the new version of the alien. The bony ribs (or are they gills? Cause that would be REALLY cool) look quite creepy.

As for the background- first of all, I'd advise not saving things for the critics lounge in as J-pegs.  It adds extra pixels. Use something like PNG's, which will show us exactly what you drew.

Onto the background!


I did a paintover, because I like paintovers. I only did it at half size because I didn't do any changes that matter on the pixel level.

First, the panel in the background has REALLY messed up lines.  I matched most of the lines to the top, making everything nice and square.  The only thing I didn't fiddle with was the gradient on the blue window things and the control panel. I made the control panel inselt, because the idea of trying to draw all those buttons in perspective made me sad.  I also made the lever red, because you said it was supposed to be.

I agree with stuh on the teleport thingy.  The perspective is really strange. If the white pedestal thing goes all the way around, you should be able to see it all the way around. I made the whole thing more rounded as well- the sharp corners at the edges made no sense.

There is a lot of empty space in the room, so I moved the panel down and the transport thingy up.   This just balanced the room a bit better.

[Indie Boy]

Thanks I'm not that great at backgrounds and perspective but thanks for the paint over and the advice about .jpgs

They are ribs(to make him look flexable) but i could use them as gills because he could end up in water (you can tell i haven't got much of a storyline)

I do have a idea. Well sort of. His race killed off all females (something went wrong!) and the only way to reproduce is by cloning, but this makes a evil double and the person who was cloned has no memory. This is what has happened to Alein and he needs to escape, but this is as far as i have got. Is this a good idea?

[Indie Boy]

Heres a updated background


Idea for a name for the game "Alein - Final Front Ear" (they clone them by using their ear wax)

[Developer]

Thats crazy. lol