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Title: Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Fri 20/06/2003 20:58:50
I am finally starting a game but first I want crit on my art style, so without futher ado:

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/bedroom.gif)

What do you think?

The pink spot is the perspective point, I just kept it in for reference. Please comment on the style in general.

Thanks in advance.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: agsking on Fri 20/06/2003 21:06:40
Looks good, except the light bulb look too big.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Morgan on Fri 20/06/2003 21:06:58
That is one huge light bulb!

I think that the bed looks odd, there are no feet it's just a huge mattress.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Synthetique on Fri 20/06/2003 22:06:06
heheh... mods fm..
the sandwich looks a bit odd... it looks like we only see the bottom of it.. remake so we can see some side of it too and make it not facing the screen...
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Proskrito on Fri 20/06/2003 22:12:55
i like it!  :D ;D
Maybe the only things i would say is that the pillow looks a bit flat, try some applying some shading.
And, the souls & mags box looks a bit strange to me, but i coudnt say why.
Other that that, i think it will work excellent in a game
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Nacho on Fri 20/06/2003 23:03:36
You should put deep to the windows by putting that white lines more outside... It seems that the lines are flat. All the rest is ok.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Neole on Sat 21/06/2003 07:26:24
Nice! The bottom of the room could do with some cropping and the two boxes could have their tops removed entirely, or at least quite a bit of their tops cropped.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sat 21/06/2003 14:44:25
OK, version two ahoy:

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/bedroom2.gif)

I think the changes are pretty obvious, so crit away!
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Synthetique on Sat 21/06/2003 15:07:37
hey veryweirdo.. i edited it a bit.. this edit is too obvious. :)
everything looks good but the floor..
i thought it looked better like this..

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/bedroom2b.gif)
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sat 21/06/2003 15:18:40
Woah cool, thanks synth, how did you do THAT? It's a big improvement thanks!
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Flippy_D on Sat 21/06/2003 16:38:59
What the hell is that stuck to the ceiling?

Not bad at all. The door could use some shading though - it looks a little 2D at the moment. You might consider a shadow underneath the shelf.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sat 21/06/2003 19:58:38
Flippy - it's supposed to be a sandwich or piece of toast or something.

Anyway, I did the shading like you suggested, but the changes are to minor to post. You'd hardly notice any change from Synth's post.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Bob The Hun on Sat 21/06/2003 21:49:17
Nice! You might want to do some shading on those boxes (unless you already have). They look too flat.
Other than that, I like it!
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sun 22/06/2003 11:17:10
I tried shading on the boxes but it just turned out the same colour when I saved it as a gif file (limited amount of colours, y'see).
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: danny* on Sun 22/06/2003 12:29:48
i gave it a little try too,..some shades added,thicker door,...hope you don't mind!! :)
(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/bedroom3b.gif)
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sun 22/06/2003 15:07:24
Of course I don't mind......in fact that's even better than my attempt at shading!

Do you mind if I use it in the game?
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: AndersM on Sun 22/06/2003 15:50:01
The shelf looks to thick, else it's a good pic.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: danny* on Sun 22/06/2003 16:16:54
not at all!!! :D
the only thing is that .....it needs more shading!!!!
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: agsking on Mon 23/06/2003 01:02:56
Wow! Majorly good improvements.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: n3tgraph on Mon 23/06/2003 11:03:54
I don't like the grassy carpet

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/bedroom3d.gif)

I don't know if this is better,
but it's a try :)
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Rincewind on Mon 23/06/2003 16:02:44
A very nice picture from the start, but I must say that N3TGraph really has a point about the floor - Blue looks better.

Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Neole on Tue 24/06/2003 07:40:58
I displike the grassy floor too, else great image.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: n3tgraph on Tue 24/06/2003 07:53:44
take a jiffy at this:

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/samplecol.gif)

it's what I learned at school  8)

these colours are cursing together (right?)
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: Neole on Tue 24/06/2003 08:01:08
And this -
http://www.color-wheel-pro.com/color-theory-basics.html
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: on Wed 25/06/2003 18:25:03
The pillow on the bed needs to be detailed more. Right now it looks like page that came off a newspaper.
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: D · Y · D · O on Wed 25/06/2003 18:53:03
Quote from: N3TGraph on Tue 24/06/2003 07:53:44
these colours are cursing together (right?)

Vloeken samen?
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: taryuu on Thu 26/06/2003 04:02:02
more shading all around. and if the light is on you need to shade the bookcase differently.  but nice, nice.  
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: n3tgraph on Thu 26/06/2003 08:21:46
Quote from: D · Y · D · O on Wed 25/06/2003 18:53:03
Quote from: N3TGraph on Tue 24/06/2003 07:53:44
these colours are cursing together (right?)

Vloeken samen?

heh yeah 8)
Title: Re:Bedroom for C&C
Post by: SLaMgRInDeR on Thu 26/06/2003 16:25:13
looks good! but i think the window looks a little strange, it dosent use the perspective point, and make the shelf use it too, and the pillow looks too small, other than that its great!
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