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Title: C & C Old office, background
Post by: on Sat 23/07/2005 16:02:48
Ive drawn this office and need some c and c. Hopefully any advice / improvements I can apply to all my future drawings :)

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/OFFICE.gif)

and enlarged

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/OFFIC2E.gif)

This will go with the charactor style of (http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/guy4.jpg)

Please reply!

thanks

jolley_small
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Ishmael on Sat 23/07/2005 16:12:44
I like your style :)

The only thing that hits my eye is that the desk is off perspective. Unless it's intended to be that way, you  might want to use the same vanishing point as the walls use.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: UP on Sat 23/07/2005 17:19:02
Way too empty, and in my opinion also too big. It doesn't even have chairs. And if it's supposed to be a detective's office, it really shouldn't be that big. So make the room smaller (or all the items bigger, or maybe actually both, at least with for example the bookshelf) and put more in.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: auhsor on Sat 23/07/2005 17:33:31
Nice work. I'm liking it lot. It reminds me of Maniac Mansion a little. I really like the shading on the objects, but agree that the desk looks a little funny. The biggest probem I see is that the light doesn't look real. It has no perspective bouncing off the wall. Also it probably shouldn't go into the ceiling, like it is now.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Ishmael on Sat 23/07/2005 17:57:39
Oh, indeed, your police-type-person has the same problem as my current main project's police-type-person main character... chair missing :P (Actually, my character only has a desk and a bookshelf in his office...)
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Phemar on Sat 23/07/2005 19:16:37

Hey nice BG - 5 Days a Stranger inspired at all?

The main thing I would do here is to just clutter up the room - it's a bit empty right now.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: on Sun 24/07/2005 22:30:57
thankyou for feedback. Ive attempted to do what you people said and this is what ive come up with.

ALso yes i was inspired by 5days a stranger, because i liked the style.

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/edit1office.gif)

enlarged...

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/edit1office2.gif)


thanks :)
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: skw on Sun 24/07/2005 22:55:14
Oh yea, I've had a similar idea, but Not Yet... aced me. Now it looks much, much better. Very nice style.

One small tip: FIRST decrease image colour limit, THEN save it as *.gif (look at the difference between -- for example -- the desk or a briefcase colours at 1st and 2nd image... got it?).

Know it's only a detail, but aesthetics is aesthetics. ;)
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Ishmael on Mon 25/07/2005 20:49:48
The shadow of the desk's left side isn't quite in perspective with the lamps position... It's líke there would be an equal amount of light coming from the bookshelf. And the chair's backrest's shadow is oddly short... nothing else catches my eye with it.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: nihilyst on Mon 25/07/2005 21:09:07
Maybe you would want a chair for someone to sit in. And a locker or something to put things in?
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: on Tue 26/07/2005 13:09:40
there we go made changes and added what you suggested.

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/ADDED.gif)

(http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y272/jolley_small/ADDED2.gif)
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Eigen on Tue 26/07/2005 13:34:23
Maybe you should get rid of the black outlines totally.

Overally, awsome picture dude!  :=


-Eigen
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Ishmael on Tue 26/07/2005 14:13:02
Looks good now, nothing catches my eye anymore :)
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: fertoff on Tue 26/07/2005 19:35:29
i think the pov is too high...considering the character you showed. Yo should lower the camera a bit.

but apart from that, looks nice
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: KrisMacDee on Wed 27/07/2005 11:47:32
Kickass picture! :D But I think you should get rid of the black outlines altogether. Also the door looks like it's painted onto the wall, but apart from that great job.
Bigmac
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: UP on Fri 29/07/2005 15:50:42
On the chair closer to the door, the backrest shouldn't have that light. It doesn't look straight like that.
Title: Re: C & C Old office, background
Post by: Ozwalled on Sat 30/07/2005 03:00:17
At a glance, I thought it might be good to say that given those long shadows, you may want to make a long shadow for your character(s) in this room, too.