Piano composition

[[Cameron]]

I started with Flukeblakes piece and got so distracted it doesnt really relate much to that piece anymore. So I was wanting some C+C on what you think of my writing.

http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/pianobass.mid

[Nikolas]

It is a very nice try!

My main problem here, and generally speaking, is that I don't know how much you know of music so I can't know if you did something intentionally or accidenlty.

Anyway back to the midi:

It has 3 intruments, right? the bass, the piano and some light string pads. IT works as it is very well.
I definately like the ending with the bass remaning last. Definately...
I can aslo see how it started from Flukes work and moved on somewhere else...
The melody is again very nice. It is not tonal but modal. I don't knwo if you understand this, but it is very well recived, and this type of melody is not the normal way for Western music. Good for you!
But the melody is very repeatitive. you have the same pattern of 4 fast, 1 slow,2 fast 1 slow again and again. But I'm not really sure if the variation would benefit such a small track.

I don't know what you're trying this melody to be and what you had in your mind when you wrote that. If you had added some timpani, or generlal percussion along with the bass it could be better, but I don't know because I don't know the situation.

*Nikolas relistens to the midi*

Yes, the bass definately needs reinforcement and take care as the second note in every bad is difficult distinguished.
Again as in Flukes' post, play with the velocity. Do you know what it is and how to do that. If not ask me.

The fast passage towards the end with the piano is very succesful.

Concluding: I like it! If you wanted to have variatio nin the track I believe that you could've done so, but I do think that you coose not to, so it is perfectly fine by me.

Well done!

[[Cameron]]

Thanks Nikolas,
Considering how badly I suck at percussion I used a Sibelius plug in to do it for me. It turned out rather nice I think. I know its repetative but I couldnt think how to sustain it any better.

Edit:
More emphasis on bass as suggested
http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/pianocomp3.mid

[seaduck]

I know next to nothing about composing music.. but just a listnener's opinion: 99% of your chords sound disharmonic to me.

I once read in a music theory book that disharmony is like spice: it's good if used in moderate doses.

But don't take me too seriously... I have been trying to compose a fanfare for my logo for in the past weeks, and still can't come up with anything even remotly useful.

Anyway as a whole I also like it, especially the main voice.

Cheers

[Tomas]

Well, it's a good try but it seems like you didn't really have a vision in your head before you started writing this. The melody sounds like someone randomly hitting the white keys on a piano. And those chords really pierce through my eardrums. We could blame that on my MIDI setup though, which is quite horrible.

I don't really know what you could do to make this better. But for starters, I'd recommend you to experiment with some panning. It's also a bit repetetive but I'm sure you're aware of that. As I said it's a nice try but it just doesn't do it for me.

So to conclude, it wasn't exactly my cup of tea but just keep on writing music and you'll eventually be able to lay down some great tracks that even I will like (whatever that means ).