First tune ever - what do you think?

[Oliwerko]

Hi there!

This is my first song I have ever made, could you please provide me with some feedback? What's good? What's messy?

http://oliwerko.wz.cz/Serious3.xm

[twin-moon]

It's a very annoying tune. But if you use it in a situation where you're being chased by Micheal Myers it'll scare the shit out of a lot of people.

Some things I noticed:
+ 0:09 this guitarriff-like melody in the background is really good
- 1:03 this melody (which returns a few times) gets almost out of tune. Probably due to the nature of modules. It made me feel real uneasy, if that's a good thing don't change it.
+ The structure is good; not messy at all. It is unpredictable, which I see as a plus.
- if you want to use it as a background tune you might want to make the high-pitched sound (which starts at 0:10) a little less pronounced, so it doesn't distract too much.

[Oliwerko]

Thanks for feedback,

I didn't made it intentionally for some scene, but it turned out kinda "stressy".

I have had a hard time getting it together, because quite a few notes are completely disharmonic with the background low hum.

That 1:03 is off, you're right. I tried it several times, but I couldn't just find suitable melody. I guess It'll need some more work here.

Upredictable, hehe. It's actually two times the same melody. But with a little changes. I don't know if I am going to use it at all, as it is really a annoying one, but somehow, it's just scary. Listening to that 1:03 and imagining that you are in a ship with water touching your skin... aaaargh