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Title: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: fmt on Fri 17/07/2009 02:26:57
Hey!

I made this new character today! Some lines to get you in the mood... ;D

Every single day Mr. Brown wears the same outfit: His favorite Waldo T-shirt, a pair of white socks, a pair of blue slippers and absolutely zero pants. 
A faulty hip forces him to rely on his old, hand made, wooden cane, but that won't stop him from walking around.
He won't treat you nicely, after all, he is just a grumpy old man, but the things he can tell you, the experiences he went through...well, they are worth it.




I'd really love to get some feedback

(http://imgur.com/IbXtA.png)

(http://imgur.com/02H1j.png)

Thanks!! :=
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: musicMan on Fri 17/07/2009 03:14:35
that looks really good.  i don't know much about this kinda stuff myself, i'm a musician, but maybe if he was kind of bent over to look older?  just a thought........
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: fmt on Fri 17/07/2009 03:32:23
thanks for the crit!

I thought of making him like you say, but he is not that old. He has some kind of military background; thats the reason for his good posture, but also for his bad hip.
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: Scarab on Fri 17/07/2009 05:49:58
All I could suggest is maybe some shading with the shirt, like just one darker shade of both red and white.
Unless, of course, thats not the look you were going for, in which case, great sprite.

Peace ;D
Scarab
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: Takyon on Fri 17/07/2009 13:48:19
Is this from a game you're creating? The sprite looks really good, his legs look maybe a little to thin though
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: fmt on Fri 17/07/2009 14:11:52
Thanks for the crits!

I'm not making a game right now, I'm just drawing some sprites to get back into shape. But will be making a short game really soon I think! :=
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: SpacePaw on Fri 17/07/2009 21:15:01
I love that guy! He's so...so...um..can't find the word.. Well he's hard to forget :). Kind of reminds me of that 3d movie with the grumpy old man with flying house...
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: Atelier on Fri 17/07/2009 21:20:48
That's nice, he seems to be a really interesting character form the description.

But he waxes his legs? :-\ Perhaps give him some hairs on his pegs?
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: Shane 'ProgZmax' Stevens on Fri 17/07/2009 21:52:32
A solid design overall, but I made a few small changes.

1.  Adjusted the skin shade to be dark enough and reddish enough to stand out better.

2.  Adjusted shorts/shoes shade for the same reason.

3.  Reduced size of left arm somewhat and offset the stripes so the arm does not blend so much with the body.

4.  Added a bit of shape to the stomach and some minor shading using the blue highlight around the arms.

5.  Altered hand to look more like a hand.

(http://i485.photobucket.com/albums/rr218/ProgZmax/oldman.gif)

(http://i485.photobucket.com/albums/rr218/ProgZmax/oldman.gif)


The main thing to focus on is higher contrast between colors since the composition is good.  Nice work!

Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: fmt on Fri 17/07/2009 23:05:39
hey! that's a nice paintover!

I wanted it to have flat colors, that's why I didn't shade it before.

Love the hand! That's a keeper.

The thing about the stripes is ok, I should change that...

The boxers I prefer the originals.

thanks!
Title: Re: Grumpy old man - New Character
Post by: on Fri 17/07/2009 23:08:06
Very good design, especially the face!

Could be just me, but with that striped pullover and the short pants he looks like a very young character being somehow turned into an extremely old one. Or an old guy trying to appear very young.
(This is no real crit, but it's the first thing I thought when I saw the sprite.)