The madrigal, old song in a new suit

[Andail]

Here's one of my very first more or less finished songs, which I rather recently made a new version of (the lyrics is typically old for me, being very bitter-sweet and sentimental).
Written, arranged and performed by yours truly.

ogg, about 4 mb
http://www.nolore.com/madrigal2.ogg

[Corey]

can i use it for an UT level?? ill give you gredit 

[Nikolas]

Why so high bitrate, this could be 4,5 Mb not 9!

It is a very nice idea...

The tittle "Madrigal" surely fits the atmosphere of the song.

One problem I have is that the instruments are not in sync with each other.

There are a lot of errors in the playing, or is it on purpose? And the piano sound is not very good, as well as the bass sound.

Furthermore your voice (it is your voice right?), sound very nice, but you could use just a little reverb to cover up some mistakes. And at some points you kinda lose the "focus" of the melody. The ending, is very nice again, but the drums in the end?

I also like the lyrics.

Generall opinion: It is really worthy as a song (and if it is your first song, even more), but there are a lot of things that you can work better.

The orchestration is fine, as it is and not empty, cause this is the kind of the song. But initially try to play the parts better...

Hope I didn't dissapoint you...

Very nice indeed...

[Andail]

Ok, normally I'm rather sloppy with these kind if things (opposite to perfectionist), but I have to show some ambition now, with so few replies

Did pretty much what Nikolai said. Fixed disharmonies, added a strong reverb to the song, got rid of some stuff and changed other things.

I also saved it to ogg, which reduced the size with some 5 mb (don't ask me why, my mp3-compressor is prolly bad), so I hope people can listen to this format. If not, I can still upload a bigger mp3.

Update in initial post.

Would appreciate some more feedback, if possible

[TheCheese33]

Pretty pretty good. 

[Nikolas]

Would appreciate some more feedback, if possible

Ok. And please don't be discouraged by my critic

anyway you did fix a lot of things and the reverb saved your voice (which I like, don't get me wrong).

A couple of more observations. The bass should probably play with every kick of the drum. Otherwise the kick sounds kinda empty.

From here onward you will want to read this, if you want to "polish" it even more.

I love the solo part with the flute and the other instrument, which I can't make out what it is. The flute is real, and you are the one playing it probably. The other thing, which sounds like a trumpet is well... not so real. And since you do put the flute (BTW put a little more gain to the guitar solo at around 3') keep it going up to the end. It is a nice change. Furthermore at the refren you could try adding a second voice. A third bellow, will probably do just fine (but do give it a try...) And if you do add a second voice, put just a tiny bit more reverb on that (it is used to do that on the secondi...)
And fix the ending.

The reason for this maybe harsh critic, is that I have actually heard your song, about ten times, which means that I like it a lot, and I want to hear it getting better.