James Zing! (A sprite)

[ManicMatt]

Okay, here is a character called James Zing that I may or may not use for a game.

I originally created him when I was about 8 years old, although I've made a few changes to him.



What do you think?

Now, I don't want to put blending colours and any shadows on him as that means extra time animating! What I'm looking for are any suggestions for his clothes and the colours. And anything you think could be improved.

Thanks!

EDIT: Is this a better colour scheme?

[Buckethead]

First of all. He looks really drunk. I dunno if that's what you want him to look. Even if he's drunk he shouldn't have a red clown nose IMO. About the colors: I find his skin color too pink-ish. And maybe his jacket a darker red color to make him stand out more 

[ManicMatt]

Righty then, he's a crazy wacky loon! Not drunk at all...

Clown nose??!! Oh dear.. no it's there for two reasons:

1)It's cute.

2)He's a cartoon.

I didn't want just a normal guy. Perhaps If I changed the colour of the nose? Put some nostrils on it?

I'll see if he looks better with the colour changes you suggested, thanks!

Come on people, crit me!

[eddie hitler]

I dunno if this helps, but he looks a tad stiff, kind of like he is on a coat hanger, is he meant to be tense? I agree with buckethead, his skin is very pink.maybe he would look good with a stronger outline.
I think the second version is better, the nose is still bulbous and comical, but it doesnt look like he is wearing a clowns nose.

[ManicMatt]

I want him to look relaxed and lazy. How should i change his posture?

..and is my sprite actually any good? Maybe I shouldn't bother.. 

[Steel Drummer]

Yeah, it's a good sprite. Simple, but good. His right (my right, not his right) leg is bent a bit strangely. Is it supposed to be like that? Other than that, he looks pretty good for a game. If you want him to look less drunk, I suggest you change his eyes to look less... stupid. I agree with your last post- it's not worth it to even post something to be critiqued when people don't tell you what you want to know.

[ninepug]

Made an attempt at a quick and messy paintover, hope it's okay .
As this is my first attempt at a paintover or even a real critique, take it with a large grain of salt or two .

I lowered the top of his head, the space between his brow and eyelids was a bit too much and made it look like his face was melting out from his skull like that witch from .. Wizard of Oz! can't actually remember the scene but I'm sure it was something like that.. might have been a horror movie..
Anyway!
Positioned his neck to the middle of the body and lowered his shoulders, making him more relaxed, same with the hands.
Leveled his feet as the perspective that is on the hands and head didn't seem to fit with them, other possibilty is to change the rest of the body to fit with the feet, depends on the backgrounds.
Hopefully some of this advice is useful.. though I'm not too sure of it myself .
I do like the sprite and it's expression, kinda reminds me of the Gobliiins series , quite nice :3.

[ManicMatt]

When you say drunk Yoda man.. he's not drunk as i said, but he's pretty stupid. And you did call his eyes so!   

Thanks! I love what Penguin did with some of the changes there! Great!

I tried to redraw most of it myself, so I learn and don't just copy and paste, but I did copy the side shoulder as I was struggling with it.



Oh dear the eyebrows have gone! Guess it looked good on paper, not on PC..

EDIT: Oh, I also made his trouser leg normal, so it's easier for me to animate! At least, that was the thinking behind it.

EDIT EDIT:
Thanks Eddie!

Vict0r gave me some crit on MSN, so I've changed.. his back lowered again just a teeny bit! Feet stance changed. Fingers lengthened. Made his trouser plasters a more "plaster" colour.

[eddie hitler]

huge improvement in my opinion, the hand and shoulder edit make him look much more relaxed, and I think he looks lots better without he huge eyebrows. nice