bah! cluttered poster - critique and advice wanted.

[Aljoho]

Okay. I'm doing some graphic design as part of a coursework - and i have to create a fictional advert. Its only about an hours work, so i haven't worked on it that much - and i think I'm nearly done, but i realized its actually kind of cluttered. I think the individual elements are, if not brilliant, suitable, but its just too eye stealing and i find myself not knowing where to look first.

Anyway composition isn't my strong point, and i know there are loads of designers way more talented than me, so i seek advice. I want a way to keep all the info there, and keep the web 2.0 look i love so much (sarcasm but ah well) because i think it kind of suits the the idea. Oh yes and its A3 when printed, if that makes any difference. I had to scale it down to be able to upload it anywhere easily On that note i present to you:





My main problem is not knowing where to look i think. I think a viewer first reads it top down, seeing the 'coming soon to East Grinstead', but then i find myself looking at the blurb up top and not the Logo.

I don't really want to have to put all the text on the bottom. i tried that and it just looked empty. maybe i could change the colours of important text so it stands out more? i'm not sure. maybe its all my imagination and it looks fine.

even now it looks kind of empty... not really sure how to fill it up

bah, I've just looked at it too much, and keep noticing more flaws. I'll just shut up and leave it to you guys

[Galen]

Off hand, change the font, the currency-sign to make out.
That and drop the rainbow text, it looks silly.

[SpacePaw]

yeah rainbow doesnt work well, besides "nt" blends into the "@" so it's another reason to change it