Another orchestral piece

[Oliwerko]

Hello there,

I've finished another orchestral piece and again, I would be grateful for any thoughts of yours.

I hope you'll enjoy, I've had some flute-fun with this one 

http://oliwerko.ic.cz/Blue-eyed_Girl.mp3

More background info:

Wrote as the second orchestral piece after Green-eyed Girl, again from an older sample-based draft.
It makes second part of the planned 'eye trilogy' and still is an experimentation with various orchestral instruments and techniques.

This represents a Blue-eyed Girl, a symbol of beauty and distraction.
The first part stands for the heavenly looks of such a girl when seen from distance, as she is coming to you slowly.
The second part represents seeing her from close distance, revealing all the details about her; and also all the thoughs that rush into your mind when you see her.
The Third part stands for seeing her go away, which is very similar to when she was coming towards you. And as always, as suddenly she appeared, as suddenly she turns around the corner and there's nothing but a memory left.

Finished 02/10/2010 after several days of work

[SinSin]

I like a bit of music with some emotion
I enjoyed it and thought it hit the right areas to the description given
My only question is ...Is this for a cutscene because its quite long 

[Oliwerko]

Thanks for feedback, I'm glad you like it.

Frankly, it doesn't have anything to do with any game/movie/whatever (yet). 

[Something13]

Overall, it is a very good song. You did a good job of capturing the general emotions of each part, and your material is good.

Now for the criticism... Personally I feel like the middle section needs to be longer. It is the section with the biggest contrast compared to the other two, so feel free to develop it more. Right now it seems like the middle section is rushed a little.
I also feel that the last section seems to be too sad for what is happening. I understand that it is sad that the blue-eyed girl is leaving, but right now it almost seems like she is dieing. If you want that feeling thats ok (since you could make the argument that when she leaves it is like she is dieing). If you don't, then I would suggest using brighter sounding minor chords and/or using a few less of them.

All in all it is a wonderful piece of music that would definitely work well in either a cutscene or a movie. I had a movie going (on mute) when I listened to your piece and the first part of your song fit the mood of the scene in the movie perfectly :o (it was a touching romantic scene) so good job there

[Oliwerko]

You're probably right about the length of the middle section, but I ran out of good ideas and I didn't want to force it. Nevertheless, it surely wouldn't hurt if it was longer.

And the last part - I wanted it to be kind of 'enriched' first part, that was the idea. So maybe it sounds too sad, but that's too big a change I would have to make. But I see your point.

Thanks for commenting, I'm glad you like the song