little tune designed for looping

[Femme Stab Mode >:D]

http://itkid.com/heartbeat2.mid
Please, i need advice on how to improve this.
Thank you thank you thaaaaaank you!
 

[Vel]

Try to add string chords.

[Archangel (aka SoupDragon)]

You need to add some phrasing, that is, fiddle with the velocity controls to make it sound more organic. I shall demonstrate:

http://www.btinternet.com/~peter.rocker/heartbeat-phrasing.mid

As for the orchestration, I don't think it needs a string pad since that would just muddy the frequencies used by the rainFX sound, but what it could definitely use is a good bassline, maybe a drum line, and some lowish piano chords (if you want).

Edit: I fiddled with the channel pan settings too, to make it a bit more interesting.

[loominous]

How would you like it to sound, what mood?

I think it s pretty uninteresting (to static, flat, monotonic) at the moment and think you need to add more instruments if you don t make the melody more interesting.

What instruments to add depends on the sound/mood you d like (massive, light, romantic etc).

[Femme Stab Mode >:D]

It has no mood. It's just the speed of it that I'm after, if you haven't noticed it's made of quavers only. It's half sad, half happy. Depends on what the listener wants it to be.

[loominous]

What I ment by mood/sound was more if you want a big or small arrangement.

I m not good at neutral arrangements so I put together this simple n pretty cheesy string/brass arrangement in quite a haste so it s pretty weak.

http://w1.865.telia.com/~u86517123/Downloadable_2/heartbeat2_orch_arr.ogg (~250 kb)

Anyway, I hope it might give you some ideas.

Here s the .mid file; please note that it doesn t work when played with a standard soundcard and has to be modified to play correctly (= it ll sound wierd if played); I just included it for scorereference.

http://w1.865.telia.com/~u86517123/Downloadable_2/heartbeat2_orch_arr.mid