Logo-Trailer (MPEG4); c&c please!

[foe]

hi everybody...

i made sort of a company logo-trailer for an upcoming adventure game and i'd like to know what you think of it.
i used Cinema 4D, Photoshop and Final Cut Express.
c&c please!

thanks
foe

http://www.foerstersphotoarchiv.de/trailer.mp4
(right click, save as, 1,8MB)

[Darth Mandarb]

I rather liked that.

I think the second bit of zoom-in isn't necessary.

I like how it zooms up the table, focuses on the typewriter, and then backs off a bit.Ã,  But then it stops, zooms back in before pulling out to the fade to logo.

I think you'd be better suited if it;
zooms up the table, focuses on typewriter, pulls back and then fades into the logo.

Might also be cool if the typewriter keys are being depressed to spell out the company name?

[rodekill]

This is beautifully done, but I agree with Darth about the second zoomy bit.

[Sam.]

can somone point me towards some software that can play this?

[BlackMan890]

videolan free and playes everything and i mean it

[Relight]

Sweet - did you model that yourself?

I would suggest building the rest of the room that this table / typewriter are in, I think it would be good. Because it is a bit odd starting off under the table with the table just floating.

[D · Y · D · O]

The bottom of table surface should be slightly lit.
Also I think the table could use more detail. Round legs would be more convincing as well as some form of lateral stiffening i.e. horizontal connections between the legs in the top or perhaps a cross at the bottom.
I also agree with the zoomy bit.

Otherwise a great animation!

[Sam.]

I am in two halves on this. I like the simplicity of this but there are element which feel empty. AT the start you just see legs and it looks like the legs are floating around on their own. Also i think it woul suit the tagline to have maybe quite a modern room in the background to contrats to the typewriter.