Emo/Gothic Char for Critique/Redraw!

[None]

Here's an Emo/Gothic Char I'm thinking of using in a stylized game. However I'm not sure yet. Any suggestions? DRAW OVERS ARE WELCOME!

[Ryan Timothy B]

I'm thinking if you replace the white on the toes of the shoes (perhaps with a light brown / red-ish brown) it will help bring out the white in the skin.  Loving the hair and the completely covered eye and eyebrow.  The pointy chin kinda helps out the slouch look, also with the hands back.  Overall, I like it.

[ThreeOhFour]

I had many suggestions so I have done an edit.

[None]

Damn sweet BEN! Why aren't you on your MSNGR? lol! How about doing one of those 12-framers your so good at for me! LOL

[monkey0506]

Well my biggest critique would be this "emo/goth" grouping you seem to be doing. Although granted, most "emos" are somewhat posers in that they often adopt characteristics from other groups, I really feel pretty strongly that the two groups are still separate and distinct from one another.

That said, I agree mostly with the shading and whatnot found in Ben's left-hand edit. Though I think that Ryan is correct that perhaps something could stand to be done about those...erm...feet.

I'm not sure what exactly this is supposed to be here, but it seems to me he's standing in just socks. I say this because the contours of the feet seem closer to that of actual feet than more rigid shoes; but then they do seem out of proportion in that respect.

Other than that I'd say, "yes".

[None]

I agree with you completely dude, Emo and Goth are really pretty different groups. I consider the character 'emo' but some people say 'what's Emo?' while most people know what a Goth is. That's the only reason for the combined label... You could also add Punk, Skater and Indie. Those are similar too. (but this is a forum for critique, not sociology...lol) P.S. As for the shoes, if anyone has a edit? That could demonstrate a way to remove the 'sock' look from them... Much appreciated...

[ThreeOhFour]

Here is an edit of the shoes only. Not really a big change, just to give them shape.



I am hopeful this is an improvement.

[None]

Thanks Ben, you made them look like the sneakers I wanted. Now the trick becomes to animate the little bugger. Not an easy task since his walk can't be too 'perky' for sure.
EMO RULES! EMO RULES! EMO RULES!
To cap this thread. I thought I should show my progress, with some turnarounds I did. Thanks Everyone! Any further PM me or e-mail me at shonenaiguy@live.com

[eternal_renegade]

I like the style! Also he seems like he would definitely stand out as a main character.

[deadsuperhero]

Might I suggest his name be "Slitty McWrists"?

In all seriousness, though, that looks great.

[None]

Or perhaps "A. Cutter?" eh Psychopath? Actually I'm in the market for a good name, but I think Slitty McWrists might be a little too comical! Thanks for the comment though, Right now I'm still wrestling with walkcycles (which I'm not very good at.) But hope to have more with this Char in the FUTURE!

[deadsuperhero]

Or, maybe you could adopt a real name, I've got a few friends with unusual names.
Zacc Fierce, Chris Tragedy, Alan Humor

Just a few suggestions.
Still, that's an ace looking sprite! Is he going to be the main character of your game?

[None]

Yeah he is, I'm really in love with the Char design, specially the updated version done by Ben. And yes he's the main char. I've got some uploading to do, but I can show you the 'complete' turnaround set if you'd like. As for the walkies (they're gonna make ME commit suicide uggh.)


Here's that turnaround!


Edit by ProgZ:  Please don't double post!