I'm pretty happy with how my Roger sprite turned out, so I redid Bea in the same style. I can't seem to get the face right, so i'd appreciate any feedback, c&c... I notice that the right leg is a bit off as well, so i'll probably do a little more work on her.
(http://img64.photobucket.com/albums/v196/pixelcat/sq6.gif)
C&C welcome... I put my photo reference in the image.
Very good!
The left foot (her right) should a bit shorter, like the Roger's one.
Her bent arm seems a bit long, try moving her elbow a bit closer to the body.
Fix the fist on the other arm, it looks weird.
All I can say is that this is superb character... but her right hand is somewhat too unrelaxed. Like It's made of wood or something. Give it a little curve and less tension.
Same goes for fingers on right hand.
Brilliant! The only thing I'd crit on is that her right leg (my right) looks a a little knock-kneeed
Really nice sprite, i could only suggest to rework the nose to make it a little 'softer' as it looks too defined at the moment.
Very pro looking chars!! I'd very much like to see 'em animated! :) Boy, that's a lot of work!
First of all, i must say characters look stunning! And that close-up shot is superb too.
I think girl char is already perfect as it is, but since you were asking for feedback i did a small edit- especially on her face and legs that you said, you weren't completely satisfied with.
I'm posting 2 versions with different eyes.
(http://users.volja.net/igorsi1/edit1.gif)
No offense, but I like the original eyes better - your first one looks like she has really bloodshot eyes, and the second one looks like she has no pupils.
I like Igors second edit. I can see the pupils clearly
Yup, she is looking to the right (her left) and that gives her a nice "nasty" feeling, imo...
Ah, now I see what you mean... looked like shading at first to me.
In that case, I'd make the pupils just a tad darker.
Nice Bea, her nose looks a liitle square other then that nice!
Thanks for the comments/feedback everyone, looks like I have fewer things to fix than on my last sprite.
Damien/InCreator/Zor©/Dan - Thanks for the C&C, I've been working on your suggestions and it looks much better.
Igor - Thanks for the edits, i'm a big fan of your work and really appreciate it. I like the second edit, looks similar to how I had her earlier... mine was a bit off though.
I'm working on my first background now, but once that's finished i'll be doing idle animations for them.
Thanks again.
http://img64.photobucket.com/albums/v196/pixelcat/bea.gif
Made quite a few changes.
- Changed leg position, as suggested by quite a few.
- Modified the nose slightly.
- Altered the face/right hand, similar to Igor's edit.
- Fixed fist.
- Changed arm angle.
I'm really happy with how it turned out, though i'd still appreciate C&C. I'm going to finish my first BG, then i'll get started on animating (ug!).
i think i'm in love! great work!
Mmm... I know criticising an edit is quite annoying, :( but I prefered the pose in the first one... It looks more aggressive, but I could be wrong, of course...
I like the new eyes a lot. On men, it looks cheezy to have the "whites of their eyes" showing, but on women, it makes their eyes appear bigger and more expressive, an in this case, she seems to be eyeing Roger. 8)
I'd fiddle with the arm again, it looks either too long, or too thin. Perhaps stick her hip out a bit?
I reckon her boobs look a bit oddly shaped(too far apart, and too big) she looks older too, based on her figure. Also, when people put their hands on their hips, they usually lean towards the hand on their hip. It kinda looks like she's either leaning away, or tightening her belt or something. Otherwise, I like the shading.
Thanks for the continued feedback, think I might change a few more things when I finish the BG i'm working on.
Great edits! It's more or less perfect now.
If you'll bother with more fixes: i do think Cosmicr has a point about her posture. To solve this, not much would have to be changed- just make left (her right) leg completely stretched... similar as in your first version (right now it's a bit bent).
But i think no one will complain even if you'll leave it as it is :)
:D
Woo! Great sprie my man! I love it - much better than I could ever do
I think the side-looking eyes are cool - but will they look good looking forward? Otherwise she'll be looking side ways all the time....
But good work! :D
would u mind if i draw my criticism on ur last sprite(easier for me i think) or u prefer it written in words?
cheers,
TheSaint
Thanks for the continued feedback... I'm finding it hard to find time at the moment, so no updates.
TheSaint - I'd appreciate any criticism, whatever's easier. :)
(http://galeb.etf.bg.ac.yu/~pdejan/bea.png)
right hip/waist area is like if someone had smacked her with a baseball bat leaving a piece missing,
legs/thigs should be thickened (blue lines) or the legs changed a bit so it doesnt give impression that parts are broken or too round.
i hope i helped a bit,
TheSaint
[edited: typo wrote thin instead of thick]