New female character (Need help)!

[BerserkerTails]

A female character for my game, The Tablet of Altheria. This is what I've got so far, but she just... doesn't look right. Any suggestions? They would be most appriciated!!

[santiago]

I like her shoes and how you did the face with the lush hair.  

What I did react to was her arm. It looks kind of over-sized and "thick", try make it thinner and a bit smaller.   8)

[Kweepa]

I did a quick paintover...



I strengthened her chin, lowered her shoulder and breast, thinned out and lengthened her arm, raised her buttocks, and squared off her trouser cuff. Plus twiddled a couple of pixels here and there for the heck of it.

Looking at it again, maybe she's standing a bit hunched over. You could try putting a bit of a curve in her back as if she's pushing her stomach out a bit, or maybe moving her shoulder and arm back a bit.

Or, for a completely different look, draw her at 3/4 view like the old LucasArts games do for a stationary character. That works much better for a side view. Takes a bit more time though

Steve

[Evil]

Whoa, its been a while for me. People dont realize that making a side angle first is a bad idea, its a lot harder. Always work out your front til you are almost 100% happy with it.



I hope I got my point through and this picture helps some.

[BerserkerTails]

Steve McCrea: That's perfect! The chin looks amazing (One of the main things I didn't like about mine), do you mind if I use this version in my game (With maybe a few touches here or there)? Of course, credit will be issued ^_-

Evil: I can see how doing a front view first would help with doing the side view... I'll keep that in mind for my next character.

[Kweepa]

BerserkerTails - go for it!

[BOYD1981]

i've always found front views harder to do if i've done the side views first and often vica-versa...
i've noticed a few inconsistancies with Evil's front view compared to the side one, for example her trousers are higher up in the front view, and her breasts are higher up in the side view...
one thing i always do when making a character is draw either the front or side view then, on another layer, i make horizontal lines at the tops and bottoms of features such as the eyes, nose, mouth, shoulders and waist as it helps to get things in the correct place...
one thing you might perhaps want to do on your side view is shorten the mouth, unless she had a mouth like cherri blair or julia roberts (BLURGH!) you wouldn't see her lips that much from the side  
apart from that, i like it

[MrColossal]

i just wanna say that she looks a little off balance cause her legs are so straight and her butt comes out and it looks like she's a tad off balance, maybe angling her leg back a little?

and to counter boyd, her lips would do that if you want them to. especially since she's a cartoon she can do anything she wants

but otherwise nice character i like her shoes

[BOYD1981]

to counter MrColossal

A female character for my game, The Tablet of Altheria. This is what I've got so far, but she just... doesn't look right. Any suggestions? They would be most appriciated!!

he asked for suggestions, i gave one

[MrColossal]

...hello mr defensive

i countered your suggestion, so what? i didn't say "shut up boyd you don't know what you're talking about". Are you saying my suggestion is any less valid?

anyway....

here's what i was talking about, probably won't look quite right:

[Evil]

Boyd, I just wipped up a character, no intention to be exactly the same. Just an idea.

[OneThinkingGal and ._.]

Oooh...paintovers.



Don't know why you want that funny pillow shading. I changed that a bit.

[BerserkerTails]

Oh no! Too many suggestions!

Mr. Colossal: I like your idea... <Changes his sprite again>

OneThinkingGal: I like the pillow shading... But I like your version's hair too... Can't decide...

[OneThinkingGal and ._.]

I changed a lot more than the hair heh.

I gave her a bigger butt, unless you wanted her stick-thin like that and also raised the upper edge of the trousers. And a bigger chest.  Oh yeah, forgot I moved her arm back a bit too, so she looks a bit more stable.

In addition to the shading changes.

You could keep the other stuff and shade it how you want but I don't like pillow shading personally...it makes little sense. Nothing is pillow shaded in real life.  

[BerserkerTails]

I did notice the chest area, but in my opinion, her butt is too big on your version.

I change the actual sprite to have a chest much like your versions.

Wow... I didn't know I'd get this much feedback on just one sprite! I should do this more often ^_-

[MrColossal]

hehe, nothing is pillow shaded in real life maybe, but if berserkertails wants it like that then it's fine

just saying, just cause some people don't like it doesn't mean it isn't right.

[OneThinkingGal and ._.]

* OneThinkingGal and ._. points out the word 'personally' in the post

I don't quite see where I said it isn't right. Altho if you're just saying it to be saying it, its fine. Just sounds like you're objecting to something I said.

[MrColossal]

good lord, i was just saying it to offer another point of view. and i did say "just saying..." but whatever

[Las Naranjas]

GET OUT YOU F**KING FASCIST MR COLLLOSSASALL!!!1!!!

[remixor]

Sorry to ruin the mood here, but what exactly is "pillow shading"?