Need a spell check

[Candle]

Please delete or lock .

[MoodyBlues]

This should be in the critic's lounge, but I'll give you my suggested version, anyway.
And by the way, never be afraid to use an automatic spell checker

Spoiler

0.Well, what do you want?
1.I'm looking for a pink flamingo, and I see you have one.
2.Why yes, I do have one! What about it?
3.Well, I need one, and you have one.
4.Well, I just can't hand it over.  I looked high and low for a pink flamingo, and when I found it, I went through great depth to get it .
5.I could use my shirt washed!

dialogue..

@S // dialog startup entry point
DARKMAN:Hi there.
MIKE: "WHAT THE HELL?"
return

@1 // What are you doing up here?
DARKMAN:I'm sorry, I didn't mean to scare you.  I just like it in the dark.
option-on 4
return

@2 // So what made you come up here and stand in the dark?
DARKMAN:Well I have the skin problem and people laugh at me.
MIKE:...
DARKMAN:It does get lonely up here sometimes.
MIKE:Don't you read or something?
MIKE: You should see a doctor… or a vet, maybe.
DARKMAN: I don't know, I kind of like it up here.
return

@3 // Well, I have to go and get to school.  Bye.
DARKMAN: Okay, bye.
stop

@4 //Well, maybe I can help.
MIKE:What do you like to do ?
DARKMAN:Well.....
MIKE:Well....
DARKMAN:I like music.
MIKE:Good, that's a start.

return

@5// Anything else?
DARKMAN:I know!  A good apple would be good.
DARKMAN:Never get many apples.
MIKE:Hmmm,  Okay, maybe.
stop

[close]

[Candle]

Thank you for the help
.I didn't want it crit just help with the spelling etc thanks again . ..

[DragonRose]

If you want a spell check (i.e. to check that each word is spelled correctly), use a spell checker. It is more efficient than a human.

If you want someone to EDIT it (i.e. to make sure that it makes sense logically and grammatically, as well as checking the spelling), use the proper word.

As for editing... well, while I was typing this out, MoodyBlues already posted. I'm going to post this anyway, because it explains some of what he did, and looks a few things he missed.

1. What is supposed to be happening? This is completely out of context, so it's a bit hard to figure it out.

2. You should have dialogue 3 (your goodbye dialogue) at the end.

3. What is that bit at the begining? Does it have any relation to the rest?

4. When using commas, there is a space afterwards but none before.

5. In dialogue 2 "It does get lonely up here sometimes.?" doesn't need a question mark. It's a statement, so use a period. And only use one kind of sentence ending punctuation mark at a time. (??? or !!!  are common ways of showing emphasis, though not gramatically correct)

6. Several responses seem to have no connection to the
questions.

7. Sentences begin with capitalization. Therefore, every new line of dialogue should begin with capitalization.

8. Furthermore, don't capitalize in the middle of a sentence, unless it is a proper noun (such as a name, a city or a title).

9. "I went through great depth" doesn't make any sense. "I went through a great deal of trouble" "I went through a lot," etc. make more sense.

10. Contractions have apostrophes. So "Thats" should be "That's."

11. On the flipside, plural words don't have apostrophes. So "apple's" should be "apples."

12. An elipsis (a bunch of periods meaning someone has trailed off) should only have three periods.

13. Don't use the same word twice in a sentence. For example, with "A good apple would be good," you could change one of the "goods" to "nice."

[MoodyBlues]

Good point.  Candle, I wasn't quite sure what was going on, either.  Can you at least give us a plot overview or something?

And just for the record, I'm not a "he."   

[Candle]

And just for the record, I'm not a "he."

Sorry .

[DragonRose]

Candle, you didn't even call her a he. That remark was directed at me.

I was debating putting (s)he, but decided not to. Considering the number of times I've been called "he" and even "Mr. DragonRose," I should know better. Sorry.

[MoodyBlues]

Heh, it's okay  

...Mr. Dragonrose?   :