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Creative Production => Critics' Lounge => Topic started by: veryweirdguy on Sat 14/02/2009 23:12:43

Title: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sat 14/02/2009 23:12:43
SO I was asked to do a poster for an exhibition at uni about....books n stuff.

Here is what I have so far:

(http://www.perpendicular-universe.com/images/bookflyersmall%20copy.jpg)

I would definitely appreciate any suggestions before I e-mail it to my lecturer.

You have 24 hours. GO.
Title: Re: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: Trent R on Sat 14/02/2009 23:19:07
Very cool, I like the entire thing and I feel it fits the theme.

I'd work on the hardback part and spine of the book.  The shadow of the pages looks odd, and the hardback has no depth.


~Trent
Title: Re: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: ManicMatt on Sat 14/02/2009 23:24:01
The font isn't very easy on the eyes. But it is a digital style font I suppose.. hmm ignore me.

Title: Re: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: InCreator on Sun 15/02/2009 01:14:48
* Change font to something readable
* Reduce saturation. Maybe make background darker so stuff from book would feel less of a mess
* Hand-drawn page corners? They look messy compared to cleaner lines everywhere else. I'd use vectors/nice bezier curves here.
* Light from book could be intensified. It's quite weak right now-
* Don't like flying yellow stuff. I wouldn't use it at all.
* Green stuff looks strange too. If roots would turn into leaf ends without those fat bulges, it would look better... see link below. I'd also play with color a bit, try neon yellow/green or something.

www.increator.pri.ee/i/critshelp/bookstuff.swf

Overall, it looks quite messy right now and it's hard to figure out what's going on. Just like with spiked leaves, everything could use a bit smoother, curving, creative... athletic! lines. It's simply not very expressive yet.

Title: Re: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: veryweirdguy on Sun 15/02/2009 13:05:27
Thanks for your help guys! Here's v2.0:

(http://www.perpendicular-universe.com/images/bookflyer%20copy.jpg)

Slight adjustments made:

* Font changed! I liked the font but no-one else did. I concede!
* Very slight mend to the hardback part, probably not noticable, but it's not an important part I guess.
* Background made darker. Tried adjusting the saturation but did not like the results.
* Removed the yellow elements but it looked much duller. Re-added them.

Thanks very much for the advice so far! Will be e-mailing it tonight, any other suggestions would be appreciated. Thanks!
Title: Re: Postery Flyery Thing (not for dial-uppers)
Post by: SpacePaw on Sun 15/02/2009 15:01:06
It's much more readable and proffesional looking right now :) good choice :)