Short story

[Hobbes]

Waaaay back in August 2003 (yeah, it's ages ago) Andail hosted a Short Story Competition.

Since my entry was removed back then (Andail would reveal the URL later), the story was kinda forgotten...

...I recently discovered it's still online and I would love some feedback.

http://www.unosar.com/graphics/darkdevil.pdf

[Darth Mandarb]

Ummm ... doesn't seem to work?

I'd very much like to read it!

[Hobbes]

http://www.unosar.com/graphics/darkdevil1.pdf

That's the correct URL... Oops.

[jetxl]

The story starts out great, but then you just kill it.
And what is with the part that AGS turns gay people into psycos?

O.K. I know what you mean with this story. The man has become a game character. But there are so many things that contradict this...
IMO you could change writersblock into a game that he can't end. So the game has become so big and he wants to write so much that he has BECOME his character.

[Hobbes]

Spoiler below...

Haha, no, AGS hardly turns gay people into psycho's. It only made me a little mad, as far as I can tell.

But, as Kevin is the creator of the fiction, the characters exist within his mind. So the assassin simply "came to life" within him and overcame Kevin's own psyche.

He experienced this through his computer, but it was simply the assassin learning what it really was and overcoming his creator.

I agree with you on the "killing" of the story. The competition back then was to write a story less than 5 pages, if I remember correctly, somehow related to AGS. Or, at least I interpreted it as such...