C&C Juvenile Novel (WIP)

[The Suitor]

I'm a beginning writer, and I've dabbled in a few short stories. But I've decided to try my hand at a Children's Novel. If there are any writers here, I'd love a few pointers to put me in the right direction.

here's what I have...
http://www.mediafire.com/?6jmgtbfnjb4


p.s. I don't know If I can post this here, but I think I've seen stories and such before on this forum. Plus, I didn't see anything against it in the rules. Forgive me if I'm wrong.