hello fellow agsers, i wrote some stories recently, and I wondered what you thought. I posted them on elfwood, hoping for some c+c, but no dice. I wondered what you people thought.
Here they are! (http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/libr/j/s/jsinc86/jsinc86.html/)
"only" is the first part of a nearly abandoned story of an elf-orc,
"Dead Soldiers" is aÃ, story of a soldier who decends into madness
"Monks shame" is a badly writen piece about the transformation of an unsuspecting monk.
Please tell me what you think, I can't improve without feedback.