Drawing up for Crit.

[Squinky]

Hi there.

I have been drawing a lot, trying to get better. I did this one up tonight and I really felt happy about it. So, I figured I would ask for unbiased opinions and any advice to further my learning. I do know that there is a little issue withthe eyes I am unhappy with, but it would be good to hear others still.

Here it is:



I drew this up on request of a person on a tabletop RPG forum, so if it helps, here is his request:

Verse
6 foot tall surged female elf. Japanese extraction, small on the ears. Well endowed. Small horns on forehead, vestigal "demon" wings. Wears corsetry and short skirts, long fingerless gloves, serious high heel boots. Weapon of choice a fan with hidden blades in the struts.
No obvious tech please.

I was going for a gothy pin up look. Thanks for any advice.

[Evil]

Over all it looks very RPG. Great character.



The perspective of the wings was off. The legs were too, and still a tad of in my edit. Removed the line in the skirt, because it took me forever to figure out what it was. The Line looked like the leg line. I mean, it could have been kept, and was partially correct, just confusing. The arm was a bit disproportionate, and the angle of the shoulder was askew. Did a little eye edit too, just too much going on.

[OuchMyTentacle79]

I like it lots.It would be a pretty cool tattoo.

[MashPotato]

I really like all the cool little details you have in there, particularly the raised arm ^_^

I made a couple of very quick edits:


changes:
-removed a lot of lines on the face, as I thought they made her look a little old.  Perhaps this was intentional, however
-changed shape of eyes from going downward to upward
-shortened eyebrow
-raised mouth slightly, changed shape of jaw
-raised breast a lot
-changed eye direction

some suggestions:
-the wings are in a very prominent part of the picture, but are very plain compared to the rest of the character.  A little extra detail would be good there
-her right forearm looks a little short

I have to go out now and I'm rushed to write this so if I've been unclear about anything please ask me to clairify.
Good work so far ^_^

[thewalrus]

     I think it looks awesome... and I agree that it would make a really cool tattoo. Art is not my thing so I can't really add any input on what is wrong..... to me it looks perfect just the way it is!