Hi
My band is going on a summertour across Europe in about a month and therefore we need a shirt we can sell along the way.
The shirt is going to be black and we can only press in one colour, so that's why the lay out is a little dull.
(http://www.nielshs.dk/game/shirt.jpg)
This is the back of the shirt...
Any surgestions how to make it better?
No, but in anotjher semi-related topic:
Can you give us a little more details about the concerts? I live in London ;)
Shouldn't the shirt say more specifically where each concert is? London's a big place..
I'm going to see them in blah blah! I think it's placeholder text.
I'm guessing it's a punk band?
I'm guessing this is the back, the front would be nice with just the band logo.
Well, first, you should have the place you are playing and then the city (ie: CBGB's, New York City). The year should be listed at the top (2006 Tour), and if there's a date in 2007, then add it to the end of that single event. The spacing of the text seems a little wide to me. The bottom quote should have less space between the lines.
As for the printing, white tends to bleed more then other colors. Your character should have thicker lines because he will probably end up looking a tad blurry.
Also, I'm not too sure about the checkmarks. Maybe, "Mighty Midgets infected:".
Personally, I'd get rid of the block of white, and have the writing in that part colored.
Other than that, Evil's ideas are pretty solid.
As for the 26/27 June in London, if I can get the time off work, I'll be at one of them.
Ok, hoping these are correct:
Mighty Midgets
27 Jun 2006 20:00
16-18 Whitechapel Rd., London (UNITED KINGDOM), E1-1EW
Cost: 3 £
Mighty Midgets
26 Jun 2006 20:00
Not Available, Camden Town, London (UNITED KINGDOM),
Cost:
Nothing about the shirt though ;D
Thanks for all the crits.
Nikolas - I think the tour dates you've found are right. All the dates and places can be found somewhere on our crappy site: www.mightymidgets.dk
Spleen - We've tried making the text and drawing white, but the white box had a way better feel to it.
Evil - Very useful.
ManicMatt - We are a punk band and we also suck pretty bad. BTW this is the back and there will be a small band logo on the front.
Ps. I hope some of you can make it to one of the shows, because I've never met anyone from the AGS community in real life and that would be cool...
EDIT:
Is this better?
(http://www.nielshs.dk/game/shirt2.jpg)
Here's the front:
(http://www.nielshs.dk/game/front.jpg)
The new version is definitely better. What happened to the "Talk to the nose blah blah.." bit though? I liked it.
I just listened to the music samples on your site. You rock! If nothing interferes, I'll either come to your show in Dortmund or Cologne. So save one of those shirts for me ;D
The one thing that I react one is that the big bandname is supposed to look handdrawn/written. As such, it looks a little weird when exactly the same letters come to use several times. I think you should redraw the bandname by hand to give it that final touch. :)
Looks great... but I don't think anybody would want to drink that beer, considering the name of the brewery that made it ;D
why aren't you guys comming to Holland? dammit!
Holland IS rock n roll!!!
come over here we've got legalised prostitution, drugs, woodenshoes!
Purple Turtle and Rhythm Factory, eh?
Which one are you going to, Nikolas?
Maybe we can hold our own Midget Mittens there.
Wow, the Critics Lounge moves fast these days.
Thanks again for the crits.
Here's a new one:
(http://www.nielshs.dk/game/shirt3.jpg)
Is this better og worse.
FruitTree - We would love to come to Holland and play. We actually had a gig there on the tour but we had to cancel it because we had to drive like 12 hours to get there. It would be too expensive. Sorry...
Umm... remove the website for starters. It's unnecesary. I'd also agree with the handdrawn name, as it DOES look strange having the same letters pop up... :)
- Huw
Much better. All that white was gonna be a printing nightmare. This is tolerable.
Oi
Here's the final layout:
(http://www.nielshs.dk/mm/shirt.jpg)
As you can see there's a few new dates as well incl. two in Holland!
Hope to see you there...
Word!