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Creative Production => Critics' Lounge => Topic started by: KANDYMAN-IAC on Wed 05/05/2004 09:04:50

Title: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: KANDYMAN-IAC on Wed 05/05/2004 09:04:50
Hi this is done based on a song i did last year... the cover is what is being marked and has to suit the song style...

please criticise both...Ã,  the band never took off cos i lost the guitarist... and all i had as a guitarist...

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/cd_cover_angel.jpg)

and here is the song...

http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/myangel.zip

PLEASE RIP IT TO BITS... I want this to look GOOOOODDD... (plus i wanna get the song nice as well)
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: Renal Shutdown on Wed 05/05/2004 10:57:02
I'm not too keen on the eyes, they seem a bit too "stuck on".  Maybe blend them a little better.
On the left, the shirt color seems to bleed into the background.
Maybe move the writing slightly, so that the gap to the left of "the devil.." is the same as the gap to the right of "..you don't".
Other than that, it's nifty.
Um..  the song?  ..myangel.jpg?

Hugs
Iqu
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: KANDYMAN-IAC on Wed 05/05/2004 15:26:40
OK... link to song fixed... everyone please download and listen...

love the kandyman....

yes that is me on the cover btw...
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: Pet Terry on Wed 05/05/2004 15:48:04
Well the eyes in the cover seem to be pretty bright, but dunno if it's how you want them to be. Other than that it looks good to me.

About the song... well atleast I managed to listen to whole thing :P Okay, so I think the guitar and singing went really well, nothing to say about them, but in chorus I noticed that in one part the singing goes really loud, you may want to fix that :)

Other than that, good job!
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: Evil on Wed 05/05/2004 21:36:18
Yeah, the cover and song are very nice.

Just a bit of critiquing of the song in general. Its quite long, and boring. Dont get me wrong its a very well written song, its just stretched out to long.

As for the singing, mix it up a bit. Jazz up some of those words in the chorus. Of course both of these can't really be changed.

But, the talking in the begining is very unprofessional. I sugest taking it out along with the blip at the end. A fade on that last part would be nice too.

I'd love to see more of your music works. Hey, if you want to write me something, I'm in the market for some lyrics. ;)
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: KANDYMAN-IAC on Thu 06/05/2004 07:33:56
revised design...

tell me what you think...

is this a better style for an acoustic set??

(http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/arc2.jpg)
Title: Re: UNI assignment- due friday... CD COVER and song...
Post by: Haddas on Thu 06/05/2004 07:41:24
I think it'd be wise to change positions for the faces. The Devil to the left and Angel to the right. Because right now you see the angel first and read "The devil that you know" and then the devil ans you read "and the angel you don't". See?