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I'm a bit out of it from building deck stairs

Were you building a Stairway To Heaven? 

And YES!  The Bold\Italic\Underline buttons are back! 

Will the cow-man himself be betrayed?  Or will he be the betrayer???     

^  Mine looks the same as Sinitrena's.  And I use Internet Explorer, and Google.   


And thanks Sinitrena, for posting it in the Forum Problems.  Never thought of that.   

Aha!  So it was Mandle who stole the formatting buttons!   

Off-topic: Is anyone else missing the options for italicized, bold, ect when posting? I only have the smileys.

I had mentioned previously in my post here, that Bold, Italic etc are missing.   

Couldn't resist tweaking my story a bit.   

It's hard to get across Tony's indulgent lifestyle, in a short story.   

Can't wait to see your idea Blondbraid   

One week left...   

[THE ONYX DRAGON]

I re-jigged my story, took out some less-important details, and tried to make it shorter cos it was getting too long.
So here's my entry.  Hope you like it.   

BTW, what happened to the options for Bold, Italic etc, when making a post?   

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THE ONYX DRAGON


Anthony Lowell is your typical rich playboy.  His life revolves around parties, women, and fast cars.  Oh, and luxury holidays!  First-class flights and Five-Star accommodation, of course!  And after his father died, leaving Anthony (his only child) the entire multi-million estate, his spending became increasingly more indulgent. 

Now he's hosting a lavish party to celebrate his return home after a 6-week holiday in Hawaii.  He‘s also planning to make an important announcement, which he just KNOWS will shock his friends. 

Several hours later, the party is still going strong.  Anthony climbs up on a chair, clinks his champagne glass, and clears his throat. 


ANTHONY:   *Ahem*   Scuse me.  Scuse me everybody, can I have your attention please. 


Everyone turns to look at him. 


ANTHONY:  As you all know by now… I was in Hawaii recently… for 6 weeks.  Well, I brought back a very special souvenir with me, which I'd like to present to you all now. 


Anthony looks towards the doorway. 


ANTHONY:  Kalena, will you come in now?   


A beautiful Hawaiian woman enters the room, and makes her way over to Anthony.  She smiles shyly at the crowd. 


KALENA:  Hello.  Nice to meet you all. 


Despite being born and raised in Hawaii, her English is very good. 


ANTHONY:   Everybody… this is Kalena Mahelona… now Kalena Lowell… my wife. 


Loud gasps are heard all round the room.  Anthony  being married is the LAST thing anyone expected.  He's the type to have a different woman every night… not settle down with just one person.


ANTHONY:   Yes, the ultimate souvenir… all the way from Hawaii.  Can any of you beat that? 


The party lasts well into the night.  Next morning finally arrives.  Anthony wakes with a loud snort, face down in the bed.  He groans - he has the hangover from hell. 

Someone kisses his cheek.  He opens one eye, and looks at whoever is lying next to him.  Of course - it's Kalena!  He's married now!


ANTHONY:  I've got this killer headache.  But after breakfast, I'm gonna show you something really special. 

KALENA:   *smiles*   Poor baby.  Let me get you some painkillers for your headache.  And how would you like some orange juice? 


Tony grunts his approval, so Kalena heads down to the kitchen.   

A few hours later, Anthony's hangover is starting to lift.  He smiles at Kalena, takes her hand, and leads her through his mansion, to a large room at the back.  In the room, amongst other ‘treasures', lies a large glass display case, with a black dragon statue sitting proudly inside.  The dragon statue must mean a lot to Anthony - several security systems, including lasers and alarms, are set up to protect it. 


ANTHONY:  I brought you here, cos I wanted to show you this.    *points to the dragon statue*   Remember I told you about this in Hawaii? 


Kalena looks at the statue, and nods.  She watches, as Anthony disables the various security systems.  Finally, he‘s able to lift the statue from it‘s place inside the glass case. 


ANTHONY:  You're the only living soul that knows about this.   *proud*   THIS… is The Onyx Dragon! 

KALENA:   *stares blankly*   The Onyx Dragon? 

ANTHONY:  Yep.  Carved from a block of purest onyx.  This statue is worth a small fortune, baby.  Only one in existence… estimated at £3.4 million… and it's MINE!   

KALENA:   *looks at it*   But it's black.  It's boring!  Why isn't it a pretty colour, like… pink?  Pink is MUCH prettier than black.

ANTHONY:  Onyx isn't pink, baby. 

KALENA:  Well it SHOULD be!   *thinks*   Can I colour it pink?  Please Tony?

ANTHONY:  No baby, you can‘t colour it pink. 

KALENA:  Meany! 


Anthony sighs.  He had tried to impress her by showing her this, but it's gone right over her head.  He resets all the security systems then takes her back to the front room. 


The next day arrives, and Kalena bounds into the room. 


KALENA:  Tony, Tony... I made these paper hats.  Well, paper crowns, really.  Which colour do you like best?  Pink, Red, Blue, Green, or Purple?  *holds up all her paper hats*

ANTHONY: *puzzled* Why on earth have you made paper hats.    *takes one, to study it*   Very small paper hats, at that.  They won't fit on our heads.

KALENA:  They're not for US, silly.  They're for your dragon toy in the other room.  Black is such a dreary colour... I thought these hats would brighten it up a little.


Tony can't help but chuckle at Kalena wanting to put coloured paper hats on his priceless Onyx Dragon statue... AND calling it a toy.


ANTHONY:  *smiles*   There will be no hats, paper or otherwise, for the Onyx Dragon, baby.  It's fine as it is. 

KALENA:  Double-Meany! 


Kalena pouts, and then leaves the room. 


Two weeks pass, and The Onyx Dragon isn't mentioned again. 

The next day, Kalena creeps into the room, and hugs Anthony from behind.


KALENA:  Tony… do you know what today is? 

ANTHONY:  No.  What day is it?

KALENA:  It's our anniversary.  We've been married a whole month!  And to celebrate, I‘ve cooked you a special meal.


Anthony turns to look at her.  She may have started out as just a ‘souvenir', but the past few weeks, he's really enjoyed her company. 


As he eats the anniversary meal, he begins to feel dizzy.  VERY dizzy.  He tries to stand up… but collapses to the floor.

Several hours later, he jerks awake.  As he struggles to his feet, he sees a note on the table.  It reads:

‘Thanks for the souvenir.'

ANTHONY:  No!  NO!  NO!!!  I DON‘T BELIEVE IT!  She CAN'T have!  That BITCH drugged me!  After ALL I've done for her... she steals my Onyx Dragon right from under my nose.  That 2-faced. backstabbing little BITCH! 


He runs through to his ‘Treasure Room'.  But his precious Onyx Dragon is gone!



On a plane, somewhere between here and Hawaii… sits a passenger.  A beautiful Hawaiian woman.  She opens her hand luggage, and carefully takes out a well wrapped ornament.  It‘s the Onyx Dragon. 


KALENA:  *laughs to herself*   Hahaha.  Oh, Tony, Tony, Tony!  You took me for an innocent young Hawaiian woman, too gullible to know the ways of the world.  You even tried to impress me by showing off your wealth.  But I knew, as soon as you described it to me in Hawaii, you had the infamous Onyx Dragon.  I just played dumb, and your stupid ego did all the rest.  You really should learn not to spill secrets when you‘re drunk.  *looks at the statue in her hands*   Â£3.4 million you say?  I could easily get £5 million for this on the black market.  And then I'll be RICH!  Stupid Fool! 

Hehe, good point Baron.  He might be trying to BACKSTAB me.   

[-> Anything goes storywise as long as at least one character backstabs another character-> Short story, not a sketch story, so at least 500 words]

Rules:
-> Anything goes storywise as long as at least one character backstabs another character
-> Short story, not a sketch story, so at least 500 words

I'm almost half-way through my story, and I'm at 768 words. 
Is that too much?  Should I try and shorten it, or keep going as I am?   


Love those trophies, btw.   

1.   14 by Selmiak (LOVE that eye)   

2.   9 by Gurok

3.   10 by Tgames



Loved 12 by Bulbapuck as well - very Simon The Sorceror-ish.
But we're only allowed 3 votes.  Sorry Bulbapuck. 

[Best writing:]

Best writing:       KConan
Best character:     Baron
Best story:         Sinitrena

The game looks great. 

Any plans for a DRM-free release?  Making it steam-only will prevent many of us from playing it. 

Those animations are looking so amazing! 

I backed you over on Kickstarter, and I'm VERY excited for the game. 

4/17 - You can also vote for Neofeud on GOG!

Voted.   

Would MUCH rather see it DRM-free on GOG, than be forced to use a steam-DRM game. 

Those screenshots look amazing.  I especially like Door To The Museum, and the statues on either side of the door. 

Glad development is going well.  Looking forward to playing it. 

Beautiful screens! 

Can't wait to play. 

I'm having SO much fun with this game.  Feels like I'm back in the 80s.   

If you can get your game on GOG, you're golden.   

Unlike steam, GOG has no nasty DRM to contend with.