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Fun stuff! Some of the text is actually quite similar to the one used in actual comic.
And i'm of course flattered.

Agree with both Andail and Pessi. Good thing with "remaking" backgrounds is, that you have already layed down composition, perspective and basic colors... so it is quite easier to start with.
On the other hand, i'm against drawing-over method (when you are learning, that is... later, all experiments can be useful), as this gives you a false feeling you are better at drawing than you really are. When in college, we had to repaint a few paintings of classic artists, but it wasn't really "draw over", as we only had a small photo of painting and had to paint a bigger version of it. That was a great learning experience, as you had to figure out what artist did by yourself and not just copy it.

What a great game! Go for it, minimi. The more people you offend, the better (joke).

I second that, hehe. If people are getting offended, that means you are giving players something to think about (the offended ones are usually those who don't want to think). The worst thing you can do, is to limit yourself, just to please everyone.
That doesn't mean you need to be offensive just for the sake of it, but if you have something important to say... go for it

I really like the animation. While i agree with suggestions about his pose, it's also important to know how realistic do you want animations in your game to be anyway. Judging by the style of character, i'd say your animation is very suiting. The viewer knows what's going on and that's the most important.

I did 2 suggestions how to make his pose more realistic (one hand shoting and 2 hand shooting), but such change in his pose would require quite complex animation, to make it look believable... It depends if you want to bother...

Great edits! It's more or less perfect now.
If you'll bother with more fixes: i do think Cosmicr has a point about her posture. To solve this, not much would have to be changed- just make left (her right) leg completely stretched... similar as in your first version (right now it's a bit bent).
But i think no one will complain even if you'll leave it as it is

First of all, i must say characters look stunning! And that close-up shot is superb too.

I think girl char is already  perfect as it is, but since you were asking for feedback i did a small edit- especially on her face and legs that you said, you weren't completely satisfied with.
I'm posting 2 versions with different eyes.

Just read it... Hm, i hope you don't mind me being completely honest, but i think Stuh and Eric have a very good point.

True, the story is not my cup of tea to start with (i was never fan of Buffy style tv shows or movies... for me they are pretty much a perfect demonstration of uninspired and cliche writing), but even as such it could have been done better.
The script is very straightforward, with no surprises, lots of cliches and no real tension and atmosphere. The beginning of story is kind of promising (notes, etc.), but later just falls flat on the ground. To make everything worse, are the main attraction of story, vampires, as plain as they can get (my first asociation were Scooby Doo cartoons ). There's just too much happening for such a short script.

Also, why not make everything more original? We saw such scenary 1000 times before. There's so many movies, books and spoofs about vampires, that you'd need to be really innovative to make it fresh and interesting.

Btw, why is there so much killing and blood in the first place? It doesn't really have any effect or purpose, because audience have no idea who the victims and attackers are anyway (what are their motives?). They just pop in story and then they die. The best horror movies are the ones with good established characters and where nothing really big happens but you can just feel there's something wrong (psychological torture ). Atmosphere and drama are your friends, nonsensical deaths are not.

If that's what you had in mind, then it's ok... But as Stuh said, leave it as it is and move on next thing.

Looking good
As Gilbot pointed out the "bopping" movement of her body is a bit too small and sparse. I think the body should move up and down constantly (depending on the position of her legs)- as it is now, the body stays still for a few frames and then suddently go up. It kinda interrupts the flow of animation.
Another minor thing that could be change is the backward movement of arms. Judging by the "forward" movement, arms swings a bit too far back.

Absolutely fantastic!
The resemblance with Depp in SH is striking. Also, for such a small sprite it has lots of character and i love the use of colors (very moody).

Here's my suggestion how to make those two views more alike. I think the problem here is, that you changed the anatomy of her face a bit too much. Smaller jaw made her look a bit more "feminine", but didn't exactly match her standing view. The changes: a bit longer jaw, smaller eye, wider head, lower lips and small change on her cheek bone.
It's not perfect yet, but maybe you could go from here.

I like Erwin's and Stuh's edit best. The problem i still see though, is that there's no real glow. To make fire really believable it must shine (give away light). Fire has usualy a bit orange glow, while the fire itself is yellow or white.

Jesus Ben... look what you've done... i'm BLIND! Blind i tell you! Where are my sunglasses?

Penguinx- thanks for your compliment
The way i see it, is wacky perspective just distorted real perspective, so it must be seen through all those bent lines... if it isn't, it will be confusing for player/audience (which is good, if that's your intention, but usually it's not).

Thank you everyone for feedback and coloring!

m0ds- Thanks! Appreciate it.

Ashen- i don't think i'll really color *color* them

Peter- nooo! This would be my nightmare come true I never liked hentai... thinking about it, i never liked anime either, hehe. Cute colors, btw!

àšltimo- I think it looks great! If i'd color it i'd probably use whiter skin (and black dress on the right one). Funny how you all pictured it as red. Cool

Pessi- thanks! Yeah, must say i kinda like those sorts of contrasts- seemingly happy scene, but with darker colors. I always felt this give piece a bit edgy atmosphere. Btw, great to hear you are in characters now. Be sure to post some

Erwin- Agree about those hair strings, they became some kind of signature of mine, hehe... But yeah, i should put a bit more effort to place them on her head in less dissturbing way.

Oh, and why is that bear looking so grumpy? It's being cuddled by a beautiful girl for crying out loud!  

Aint he a stinker? Oh well, i guess furry animal toys just don't appreciate cute girls huging them. Bastards

Line work is perfect!
Animation looks nice too. Maybe you could only add a few inbetweens more (there's quite a lot of movement for so little frames). Other than that, love it!

Not my cup of tea really...
Agree that South Park is much better than this. The first episode was kinda funny, but it did try to play on shock and gross value too much. I never thought i'll ever say this, but i like South Park's "subtle" (hehe) humor much more.

2 quick girl sketches. For nothing in particular- i had some sketches lying around for quite some time and decided to put some "colour" on them.

Hm, i liked the first face (when it was still withouth body) the most...

As for body- i think it suggest more a child (or a slight midget, with current head) than 14-15 year old. At that age are girls/boys already a bit more developed (higher, usualy skinnier, because body mass can't really follow growth). I'd suggest to make a body a bit more stretched... or make a complete exagerated cartoon out of character (the head is still too realistic for that kind of body, in my opinion).

Here's my edit (i only stretched body in Flash, so it looks a bit odd atm).

Mmm, the first 3 are so yumy i couldn't critique them even if i'd want to! Great!

As Stuh pointed out, this last one is not quite as good though. I think it shows you weren't drawing a model from photo (correct me if i'm wrong). In that perspective i'm applouding it even more than to the first three, since i somehow appreciate pics that are drawn from head more.

Now to what bothers me about that last piece. I think the pose is a bit too static and wooden (good poses were one thing i liked about first pieces the most), also i'm missing those beautiful brush strokes, that made other studies so dynamic and great looking. It seems like when you started adding details, the pic lost all the energy.
It's still good painting of course, but not as good as first three.

Champagne is opened
Man, that's beautiful piece. I really envy your lines- they look very much like scaned ones (even after 2 years of having Wacom, i still didn't get confortable with it to the point to use it for anything else but coloring).
What tablet do you have?

I think i like Eric's idea best. Not new forum, but enhanced old CL.

100 chars limit would be perfect i guess, as i must say i'm often guilty of short replys too. Usualy i don't really have enough time, so when i see some post that i like, i just leave a quick encouraging message- that is, if i honestly don't see any distracting faults. Chars limit would solve this very nicely (even if reply is compliment, you'll at least have to tell exactly why you like it).