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 Did another quick edit.
Fixed my front view a bit, changed contrasts. Also made the side view to the right.
You may copy any element that you like, feel free!

Ok I present him again! =D

 Hi, I thought I make a quick remake of the front view, I hope you do not mind.

Here he is!


I used almost all of your colors, though I should have changed the contrasts of the grays, I did change the color of the skin.
I mostly worked on the upper part and tried to put him more into proportion.

Ok I hope I was of any help! =D

 I could`t make it in the extended time (Had to sleep some time too).  :'(  Now I`ll take my time and make it better then it is now.

May the best win!

I`m working on my one don`t know if I can make it! It would probably take me a few hours more. Even if I won`t make it in time I will still give out so you can play. This will be my first finished project when it comes out. 

It is rather short as I have done it only about a week.

 As I have read your other topic and I like the style, I thought I give a piece of my mind! 



I edited it a bit (fast so it is just to make the point) and circled some things, maybe it will help you understand me better.

q - the small shelf looks out of perspective, it looked a bit weird. Also the one desk in the back has outlines whereas the first two hasn`t.

w - in your version I couldn`t understand where the two walls actually meet and it seemed like some things are on higher ground then other so I tried to fix the perspective a bit.

x - just some missing outline pixels 

y - this window didn`t have any thickness to it and had only lines.

Don`t know if the simpler grass makes it better? That`s up to others.

One thing more, you should choose some small font and try to add some text to the notes even it isn`t readable. Right now it looks like some child has scribbled on papers.

That`s all I`ve got to say. I hope I was of help! Keep up the good work! 

EDIT:
Sorry that I forgot to mention that the color choice is a lot better then in the first post, at least in my opinion. The colors don`t scream to my face.

 OK, it has been long since I´ve done something. I visit the forum almost every day but most of the times do not post. This time I decided to take part in this competition as the theme is cool and there is a lot of activity.
I must say there are so good enteries ! 

  Here is my character for the competition! I used 15 color - all of which were used before by ProgZmax and Arboris.  Hope you all like it!




He is Ryu Koden (Koden means Tradition in English), his parents moved from Japan. His mother and father wanted him to have some activities as they were on business trip back to Japan. Both of his parents apparently are keen on keeping the traditions of their forefathers. Ryu was thought of the Art of Sword Fighting and likes to take his two wooden swords where-ever he goes. In the camp he seem to have some problems with the director and instructors as he is drinking sake as a tradition in his family. He is called "Pacekeeper" as he is defending the weaker one from bullies - when he isn`t drinking sake. Also it seems that he is the only one who speaks with Amber. Some even believe that he has seen the real one, but that is probably just a myth.

Did another one for the pose! This had only minor changes. Took a lot less time as most of it was only lineart.
Remade the face as I did in the sideview!




Made her hips few pixel wider, shoulders tighter and breasts more noticeable.  And now she has a neck.

Ok, because I found some time I redrew him.
I must say the hands were the best things you did.
Always make correct lineart. Here is a tutorial that will help you understand this.
http://www.derekyu.com/?page_id=221
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And as Trihan said learn to dither, not a pillow shading.

I made two of them actually. To both images I didn´t use the brownish color. Made all the colors darker  and increased the contrast to each color(except black  and it´s gray highlight)

First: He is maybe a bit nerdier. Bigger glasses but shorter hair and not so muscular.



Second: Bigger hair, smaller glasses and muscular torso




Hope it helps! Happy pixeling. 

 I´m not very active member, but I often come here to see other works in critic or the competitions.

Because I really liked your character I redrew it.  ProgZmax would definitely do better then I, but I just so liked it.
Here is mine!




I didn´t fix everything . As the hand should be bigger, and legs maybe a bit longer.  I tried to give her more feminine look by giving her a bigger boobs. I understand if you don´t fancy my dithering(animating would be harder then also) and the that you can see the lineart(that can be lost if you do AA, but it is hard).
I also used more contrast. 21 colors with black and white.
I tried to use as many of Your colors as possible. Although I would change her fur color to pinker or something like that.
Oh, one more thing the lineart should be correctly done.
Here is a tutorial what will help!
http://www.derekyu.com/?page_id=221


Hope I could be of help and you like it! 

 It's Wow, because you even doubt that your an OK person, and what you do is right.(not drinking and stuff) Sometimes I think that I might have missed out on something, but to be honest if I think real hard, I'm glad that these kind of people aren't my friends.(doesn't mean I hate them of course) I never spend my time with my classmates after school, I keep as far away as possible from those activities. Also I'm not popular but Im respected in my class and that's what matters.

 I say: Wow!

If you ask me then you are normal person(as am I if talking about drinking and stuff )! Why I say so? Because I do not drink, nor smoke, nor do drugs! Neither do my friends. I agree that it's hard to find friends, but keep looking for such, of course you may not be popular,but hey you've got brains.
It may be weird to read, but in this young society "It is normal to be abnormal and it is abnormal to be normal!" (If you didn't get it then tell me I'll explain it)


I find drinking till your drunk, smoking or doing drugs unintelligent activities.  Firstly, wastes your health and secondly, wastes your money!(and the problems both cause) And if someone finds these kind of activities cool or funny I just must say, there is something wrong with his logical thinking or there isn't any.

 In my opinion, it looks better without lines, because the lines are too screwy, the lines may work, but they have to be straighter and thicker. I think you can make completely new lines or not to add any lines.

Man I wanted to re-make it. Well, when I finished I made a mistake and saved it as JPG and that ... killed all my effort. If I find some time tomorrow(and if there's still a need) I will do it again, but I shall go to sleep now!

I like the idea/theme. Hope I can take part(if I have the time)

  I'll show you one old drawing I did like 4-5 months(or more) ago
http://img293.imageshack.us/img293/1446/nuclear2hq3.jpg
It's not part of the competition and it's not finished

OK my element is ready.

I present you!!!  The Element Of Fun In Death !!!!!!!



It is 130x130 and 18 colors including background.

Cool topic, I will take part of this one!

(The sprite is almost ready, but it's midnight
here and I have to go to school tomorrow, so I will
hopefully upload mine tomorrow when it is 100% ready)

Nice entries so far! 

 I got home from school(Old one was posted from school library PC), drew it and scanned it! hope it helps you to improve.
I`m not satisfied how the legs turned out, so you should mainly study from upper body, hair, face and hands.
And while YOU are drawing have fun  

Here comes my version(tell my if it actually helped)






Older info
Ok, I draw manga myself so I will overdraw it.

BTW, how long have you drawn manga? Have you looked for tutorials and if you have then how much have you used those?

But keep drawing, that will make you bette!

I saw this sprite before, but I didn`t want to give any advice before(I thought they said that)

I think you should contrast body more!

Thanx, for the tips.

Scotch you have done a wonderful job! :o

Is there any tutorials of inking?

EDIT:

I did the inking again!

I use gimp also, and here my inked picture comes! 



Now start critic!

WHOW , my first inking.