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I've got an idea for a game.  It's been floating around in my head all week.  It's a prequel to the gabriel knight series.  Here's the basic idea:

High school senior Gabriel Knight has everything: the girls, the looks, and the popularity.  Life can't get any better.  So when he is assigned to write a report on people's belief in the paranormal, he figures it'll be a cakewalk.  But what starts out as a simple report on the supposed "Theatre ghost" turns into something much more sinister.  It's up to Gabriel and his friend, School quarterback Mosely, to figure out the truth behind the school, and the secrets that lie in its past.

Suggestiond for improvement would be greatly appreciated.

[EDIT]

I have been toying with this idea from making it a TI-83+ RPG to making it an adventure game.Ã,  I decided to make it an adventure game and wanted to know what people thought.

Crusader: Elemental Quest

In a time long ago, there existed four crsytals.Ã,  These crystals kept the balance of the elements: Wind, Water, Earth, and Fire.Ã,  Until one day the crystals were stolen by a dark wizard who planned to destroy the world with the crystals awesome power.Ã,  The kingdom in chaos, one man stepped forward to challenge the evil.Ã,  This man, armed with nothing but a dagger set out to retrieve the crystals, and restore peace and order to the land.Ã,  And he was simply known as...

Crusader

Coming soon from S 42 Studios

I really want to know what you think.

EDIT
Okay, so I get the feeling people are not reading my post that states my edited story, so here it is:

Crusader: Elemental Origins

Many years ago there existed four crystals, one for each of the elements: Fire, Water, Air, and Earth.  These crystals kept peace and order throughout the land.  Until one day a dark wizard stole these crystals, so that their powers could be used to revive his master.  But according to legend, a man born from the crystals, and armed only with his family’s enchanted dagger, stepped forward and defeated the wizard, and restored peace and order throughout the land.

Many years passed, and the crystals became nothing more than legend.

Now it is the year 2010.  A man by the name of Leon Cook comes home one night to find his family savagely murdered.  The only thing stolen was his wife’s necklace and his family’s dagger.  Not knowing the true power of either, Leon and his friend, detective Jack Archer, begin to search for the killer.  But Leon is about to find out the truth behind his ancestors, and the power that he possesses...

This is the new storyline, so tell me what you think.