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Dave great game great seairs so far but i most say i am not exactly feeling the new roseangela to be frank shes awful

Okay, hold it, hold it, hold it...

You copied the synopsis from a DVD as the description for your game?  Are you ripping off the story and calling it your game?

What's going on here, Branden?

(Good catch on that website, Vince.)

He's saying that he's making a game based on that movie. Like a fan game, you know.
exactly right a fan game 1:1 twlling the story in game form

Hello all its me hero again yay(not) due to the advice of many people on this board I will Produce a short game based off of Jyoou no Kyoushitsu(queens classroom)~
Plot:Maya Akutsu, a sixth-grade teacher who dresses all in black and is repeatedly referred to as "oni sensei" (the teacher from hell), when, in fact, she seems to be an ultrarealist at heart. The drama focuses on a year in her classroom and, particularly, the effect it has on 12-year-old Kazumi--a nice but mediocre student whose parents want to send her to a private secondary school.

Akutsu-sensei accomplished this feat by introducing a test-based rank and privilege system on the first day. The highest scorers on the Monday morning test get their choice of seats and other perks while the two lowest scorers are burdened with all the chores for the week from blackboard and toilet cleaning to serving lunch. The system also disallows toilet breaks during class because this reflects an inability to manage one's own schedule.

Kazumi gets the first week's work assignment along with the class clown, a warmhearted boy who is not nearly as silly as he acts. The child actors in the series are all likeable pros who give realistic portrayals of the wide spectrum of an average classroom from the isolated serious students to the sophisticated girls who think they already know what life is all about. Akutsu-sensei lets them know immediately that they do not have a clue.

When the students protest her system and call it unfair, she tells them to open their eyes. In Japanese society, she lectures, those who work hard or have influence get all the privileges, and the lazy or less affluent end up with the leftovers. She says only six in 100 people can expect to be happy and the elite already have most of the advantages and access to the best medical care. She tells them that, as products of the public school system, they will have to scramble to get anything at all, and most of them will end up as "bonjin" (ordinary people), to whom those on the top will be happy to leave the soldiering and service-sector jobs.

it is  is a Japanese drama i just finished watching what i plan to do is use 2d VGA art combined withe the original video and OST to make a short but unique game. also there is something that some of you must know. I have a disability that doesn't allow me to draw  very well but i make up fpr ot by being a good story designer and song writer however i have not been recognized by this community thus far so please be kind what i post her my stories my songs are my strong points so don't focus on my grammar or spelling i have a great mind and Ive worked really hard to get where i am

synopsis : peace , prosperity, protection. That was all I wanted for the people of my kingdom. Alas all we found was war.



            The enemy, my closest friend and ally and the former guardian of my daughter Akemi, Sen. He separated with a large group of his followers to the northern part of the country .The once proud country of Mikomi was split in two. Soon after Sen's separation a war broke out in an attempt to conquer each other. This war lasted for three long bloody years before a ceasefire was called, both armies returned to there territory and  kept to themselves for the next 6 months.

           

            As of late however a mysterious force has been pushing its way across my lands and slaughtering and pillaging as they go. I lead my grand army in several attempts to defend against this enemy all of them failing. Realizing that I could not effectively defend my kingdom because of the overwhelming odds against me I decided….that maybe *shivers* I should ask Sen for help. The thought made my spine curl but it was my only option to ensure my peoples continued survival. Not deciding to go myself I sent a mystic impersonation orb to do the job.





Upon the orbs arrival at Sen's walls I finally got a good long look at how Sen's people had held up after the war. The walls stood strong, almost as if there had never been a battle fought upon them. His people, going about there daily lives, as if a war had never been fought, and Sen, sitting on his golden throne, surrounded by his harem. Sen had been the more glamorous king, unlike me. Gold armor, pretty girls, a big army, a unbeatable fortress was all he cared about. Now tapping into the orbs power I spawned my image in front of him.





            “Well, well, well…. What do I owe to this pleaser?” Lord Sen smirked.



            “Your sarcasm is in the least bit funny” I responded almost instantly after Sen finished talking.



            “Then what is it you want then?” a serious look crosses Sen's face.



            “I have come to formally request your aid” Sen's face twists in confusion as I said this.



            “What? My aid? And why does the “almighty southern empire” need my aid for?” snaps lord Sen with a childish look.



            “You won't be so childish when this force comes beating down your door, Sen” I snapped back. Sen's face became angered once again.



            “Guards get him!!!” Sen's guards descended on me with swords and spears, all I could do was crack a smile as my image disappears and my mind returns back to my body and castle.

Characters(main)~ King Jun

Name-Jun

Age-20

Sex-Male

Race-Celestral\Human

Name-Princess Akemi

Age-10

Sex-Female

Race-Celestral\Human

Queen Amaterasu

Name-Queen Amaterasu

Age-20

Sex-Female

Race-Celestral
Lord Sen

Name-Sen

Age-23

Sex-Male

Race-Human
Character: images
http://www.freewebs.com/realmsofmikomi/charimages.htm
NOTE: IMAGES ARE PHOTOS AND PRE-EXISTING ART TO SHOW WHAT THE CHARECTERS looks like


Please Visit the company page at www.moonbeamgames.com to learn more
thank you very much
Now why i post here is to get thoughts on the story

synopsis : eace, prosperity, protection. That was all I wanted for the people of my kingdom. Alas all we found was war.



            The enemy, my closest friend and ally and the former guardian of my daughter Akemi, Sen. He separated with a large group of his followers to the northern part of the country .The once proud country of Mikomi was split in two. Soon after Sen’s separation a war broke out in an attempt to conquer each other. This war lasted for three long bloody years before a ceasefire was called, both armies returned to there territory and  kept to themselves for the next 6 months.

           

            As of late however a mysterious force has been pushing its way across my lands and slaughtering and pillaging as they go. I lead my grand army in several attempts to defend against this enemy all of them failing. Realizing that I could not effectively defend my kingdom because of the overwhelming odds against me I decided….that maybe *shivers* I should ask Sen for help. The thought made my spine curl but it was my only option to ensure my peoples continued survival. Not deciding to go myself I sent a mystic impersonation orb to do the job.





Upon the orbs arrival at Sen’s walls I finally got a good long look at how Sen’s people had held up after the war. The walls stood strong, almost as if there had never been a battle fought upon them. His people, going about there daily lives, as if a war had never been fought, and Sen, sitting on his golden throne, surrounded by his harem. Sen had been the more glamorous king, unlike me. Gold armor, pretty girls, a big army, a unbeatable fortress was all he cared about. Now tapping into the orbs power I spawned my image in front of him.





            “Well, well, well…. What do I owe to this pleaser?” Lord Sen smirked.



            “Your sarcasm is in the least bit funny” I responded almost instantly after Sen finished talking.



            “Then what is it you want then?” a serious look crosses Sen’s face.



            “I have come to formally request your aid” Sen’s face twists in confusion as I said this.



            “What? My aid? And why does the “almighty southern empire” need my aid for?” snaps lord Sen with a childish look.



            “You won’t be so childish when this force comes beating down your door, Sen” I snapped back. Sen’s face became angered once again.



            “Guards get him!!!” Sen’s guards descended on me with swords and spears, all I could do was crack a smile as my image disappears and my mind returns back to my body and castle.

Characters(main)~ King Jun

Name-Jun

Age-20

Sex-Male

Race-Celestral\Human

Name-Princess Akemi

Age-10

Sex-Female

Race-Celestral\Human

Queen Amaterasu

Name-Queen Amaterasu

Age-20

Sex-Female

Race-Celestral
Lord Sen

Name-Sen

Age-23

Sex-Male

Race-Human
Character: images
http://www.freewebs.com/realmsofmikomi/charimages.htm
NOTE: IMAGES ARE PHOTOS AND PRE-EXISTING ART TO SHOW WHAT THE CHARECTERS looks like


Please Visit the company page at www.moonbeamgames.com to learn more
thank you very much

I posted this in general discussion before but i post this here cause well its the critics lounge lol so should i make this into a game:
Story: http://www.freewebs.com/realmsofmikomi/story.htm
Main character page: http://www.freewebs.com/realmsofmikomi/characters.htm
character  concept images: http://www.freewebs.com/realmsofmikomi/charimages.htm

also what kind of gui and interaction system should it havr and also who would be intrested in helping give me your freed back

Vince is right as always I, really worried about my art  though because i want to give a accurate replication of the world how can i do that with stick people?

On topic please XD

I assume those who offer help are sarcastic

Thanks for the great advice however Even a small game for me is hard my strong suit is not art  mine is story design and SO the last thing i want(due to experience with other attempts). I hate to have this great epic idea and not have the art skill to accurately represent the world
LimpingFish:
Yes I'm sure becayse all thiygh it will be and is a vast world it will focs on one main charter and his views abd whrm i wrote itO wrote it im adventure style

The role-play itself is  more less complete all i would need is a team with enough interest to help turn it into a game all the logs are recorded and we plan to turn it into a series of novels but we dont need tp do that if i can make it into a game

Mikomi Means hope in Japanese  and as for my grammer is notthat i dont put effort in its that my grammerr sucks im workin on it bare with me

Ah however it is a very complex story with unique plot twists and its not just about to kingdom at war but the struggle of a king a father and husband you ll find that is not this in your face random generic action story but a dramatic some times comical story his wife Queen Amaterasu(Ama)is heir to the throne of  the Celestral(Ces) realm a god like race who watch over all things His daughter akemi has a great power locked inside her and must save the kingdom from this darkness but  in doing so she well die "the daughter of a Celestral and a half-bred shall unite the worlds and save all from doom" along the way however you see and feel and hear what the characters feels thus game if it becomes such will have drama love heart break war depression happiness as well as many laughable moments much like the " role play(MSN based) is now
and sen untimely is envious of Jun for having a family and  there are a viroty of charters from Tatki Juns former Magic trainer(teacher) who is old and blind but kicks ass hes always trying to teach Jun a life lesson .
right on down to his bitchy yet comical inlays Mada and baba and Mada G(Gee) and much much more its a vast universe which never ends 

Oh no no this will be a interactive story/point and click plot branching game

ha ya sorry guess i should know when to take a Joke but i do need some serious feed back from you guys i know my spelling and grammar is bad and I'm trying to fix it but aside that i really want input on the story

Taken From Chapter 1: trails
  Peace, prosperity, protection. That was all I wanted for the people of my kingdom. Alas all we found was war.



            The enemy, my closest friend and ally and the former guardian of my daughter Akemi, Sen. He separated with a large group of his followers to the northern part of the country .The once proud country of Mikomi was split in two. Soon after Sen's separation a war broke out in an attempt to conquer each other. This war lasted for three long bloody years before a ceasefire was called, both armies returned to there territory and  kept to themselves for the next 6 months.

           

            As of late however a mysterious force has been pushing its way across my lands and slaughtering and pillaging as they go. I lead my grand army in several attempts to defend against this enemy all of them failing. Realizing that I could not effectively defend my kingdom because of the overwhelming odds against me I decided….that maybe *shivers* I should ask Sen for help. The thought made my spine curl but it was my only option to ensure my peoples continued survival. Not deciding to go myself I sent a mystic impersonation orb to do the job.





Upon the orbs arrival at Sen's walls I finally got a good long look at how Sen's people had held up after the war. The walls stood strong, almost as if there had never been a battle fought upon them. His people, going about there daily lives, as if a war had never been fought, and Sen, sitting on his golden throne, surrounded by his harem. Sen had been the more glamorous king, unlike me. Gold armor, pretty girls, a big army, a unbeatable fortress was all he cared about. Now tapping into the orbs power I spawned my image in front of him.





            “Well, well, well…. What do I owe to this pleaser?” Lord Sen smirked.



            “Your sarcasm is in the least bit funny” I responded almost instantly after Sen finished talking.



            “Then what is it you want then?” a serious look crosses Sen's face.



            “I have come to formally request your aid” Sen's face twists in confusion as I said this.



            “What? My aid? And why does the “almighty southern empire” need my aid for?” snaps lord Sen with a childish look.



            “You won't be so childish when this force comes beating down your door, Sen” I snapped back. Sen's face became angered once again.



            “Guards get him!!!” Sen's guards descended on me with swords and spears, all I could do was crack a smile as my image disappears and my mind returns back to my body and castle.

Anyome out there who can stay on topic  thanks both posts have been reported

Hi Everyone A long time ago i had a idea for a project before my posting on here about "dead end Tokyo  I had written a concept story design for  a game called"Realms Of Mikomi" well one day i found it and suggested to my friends that maybe it would be OK as a role play will needless to say everyone i know is hooked on it show Ive considered turning it back into a game project what I want  however is this community's feed back. I will give you a small preview and if interested post here and ask for more
Preview:
:the sun slowly but fluidly rises and hits jun in the face slowly he rises out of bed and makes his way down the grad hall filled with hopelessness and despair of the past few months he glances at the most recent family portrait.
With tears falling from his eyes he falls to his knees... he pounds the stone floor with all his might his fist hurts but the stone has a small crack his kingdom on the brink of doom his daughter dieing all on accordance to some ancient Prophecy he stands draws his sword slashes his family painting as hard as he can it falls and breaks...
  and he  contemplates whether pr not to make that one quick motion...
then he hears a voice echo in his head,,,
"aw poor mortal don't give up hope..."\
Jun: "what would you know of hope"
everything i know and hold dear is gone..
the voice says are they truly gone Jun
Just then a white portal appears out steps ama his wife...
Ama: " Jun are you OK i came to see if your....
Jun looks at her coldly See for yourself
he says
stepping aside to reveal the broken and slashed painting
ama has a shocked look on her face  walks over and slowly picks up the painting
Oh dear that was such a nice painting says ama with great sorrow in her voice
Jun says with the same sorrow its from a time long ago a happy time
and with that ama gently takes he husbands  hand a places it on her belly button  he feels a slight push his unborn child kicks with tears in his eyes he looks up at her and asks
"is this our new hope...
she replies softly
yes my love it is..

I post here again to find a time for a company called "Orient Media Studios" We are developing games in the adventure genre with a point and click interface. The games will contain interesting and intriguing stories set in the wondrous lands of Asia.
Our current project is called “Dead-End Tokyo.” Has been called " interesting and intriguing" by  Christopher T. Warren   Chairman & President of " HIMALAYA STUDIOS"  Our volunteer group, Orient Media Studios, wants fans to enjoy our games for free. At the same time we want to provide a quality product that teaches about the culture and ways of life in Asia.
We want the story to be both thrilling as well as culturally accurate the game is to focus more on a husband and father's struggle to save his loved ones; rather then in face action.
This game is also meant to touch people's hearts as well.
We would greatly appreciate your assistance with this project.
Here is the basic plot to draw from

The main character is a young police detective with the Tokyo police. One day he is told to investigate a drug related murder, but upon doing so he uncovers information that leads him to believe that the police department, and perhaps the government itself, is involved in a huge drug ring all throughout Asia. As he gets closer to the truth however, he comes home one evening to find his house in ruins and his family missing. A note is left that says: "If you ever want to see your family again, stop your investigation or you will never see your family again. Their blood will be on your hands. They will die a slow painful death. You have 36 hours!"
Thanks again if you are interested please contact me:
I looking forward to your response I am including the story design document
http://www.gigasize.com/get.php/3195528092/DET.DesignDoc.PLT1.doc
As well as a driving engine originally coded by my form programing using the Police Quest 3 driving system
I give him credit  where ever he may be
http://www.gigasize.com/get.php/3195528156/ATT00004.txt
Please email me if interested at bandentobin@shaw.ca
We need : programmers
Musicians\composers
Story Designers to expand on existing design and plot
and  Sprite and background artists
Concept Artists are welcome as well
Sincerely Branden Tobin
President Of Orient  Media Studios
Personal Messages accepted

Hello.
We are developing games in the adventure genre with a point and click interface. The games will contain interesting and intriguing stories set in the wondrous lands of Asia.
Our current project is called “Dead-End Tokyo.” Our volunteer group, Orient Media Studios, wants fans to enjoy our games for free. At the same time we want to provide a quality product that teaches about the culture and ways of life in Asia.
We want the story to be both thrilling as well as culturally accurate the game is to focus more on a husband and father's struggle to save his loved ones; rather then in face action.
This game is also meant to touch people's hearts as well.
We would greatly appreciate your assistance with this project.
Here is the basic plot to draw from

The main character is a young police detective with the Tokyo police. One day he is told to investigate a drug related murder, but upon doing so he uncovers information that leads him to believe that the police department, and perhaps the government itself, is involved in a huge drug ring all throughout Asia. As he gets closer to the truth however, he comes home one evening to find his house in ruins and his family missing. A note is left that says: "If you ever want to see your family again, stop your investigation or you will never see your family again. Their blood will be on your hands. They will die a slow painful death. You have 36 hours!"
Thanks again if you are interested please contact me: brandentobin@shaw.ca or by private message
I looking forward to your response I am including the story design doc download it at: http://www.sendspace.com/file/x80jv3
Thank you,

Branden Tobin (AsianMusicGuy)

Head of Orient Media Studios

www.oms.f3hosting.com