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It's right with "be bespoken" because now mercy is the subject. I kinda like "bespeak" better, too, though... I'll think of a way to make that word work for you... Maybe if you just say "So that it may bespeak your mercy," although then we don't know what "it" is referring to...

I think it needs a subject... What is being bespoken? It's kinda hard to leave that particular word without a subject. Plus, it's kind of disused. You could use "proclaim" in place of it to see how it would work... "So that Your Mercy will proclaim..." Proclaim what? Bespeak what? See the problem?

Thanks. Sorry not to have PMed you, but I didn't know if just you could help, and there seemed to be quite a few greek speaking people in this thread.

Now then, back on topic. What exactly are you trying to say here? It's not like this is bad English, I just am wondering what you're trying to get across. It seems more nightmarish than depressed.

This thread's gone way off topic. The world does suck much butt, and all the people who go around moping "the world sucks butt" also suck butt because they are resolved to let it be that way. That's the end of the story. I do hate people... I hope I never become one. We don't have to be people. we can be individuals, and by that I don't mean the type of individuals who think they are individuals because they dress and act like five million other people who say they are just being themselves... Helm, I'm sorry. You might hate black people and misanthropists (that's totally a joke, so if you even say anything...) but there are a very few (misanthropes... that is... AND blacks... that is also a joke...) who might actually be on to something... What the world needs now ISN't love, sweet love... That's gay (hmmm... gay....we've been talking about that....) It needs people who hate humanity enough to stand up and not be like humans. Then (getting back on topic), we can actually go around and say "Hey! That's gay!" and "Dude, grab my balls and let's go!" and the almighty "This is a tasty weiner!" without a bunch of asshattery taking place as a result.

hey, while this has gone off from the poem to discussion about greek, I have a slight problem. I found the following engraved in a tree (I'll spell it out in the names of the letters, because I can't get a Greek font)... It seemed to be in Koine, since there were no capitals. It might not be kosher to tell me what it says, so if someone figures it out and it IS not something you want to share, please PM me. I have shown spaces as dashes...

eta - iota epsilon rho eta - mu eta tau epsilon rho alpha - H-accent epsilon kappa alpha tau epsilon - phi upsilon lambda alpha kappa alpha sigma - tau omega nu (I think) - alpha kappa alpha sigma iota kappa - alpha rho chi epsilon iota omega nu (I think) - phi rho omicron upsilon rho epsilon iota - alpha upsilon tau eta nu (I think) - tau eta nu (I think) - theta epsilon sigma eta.

I think that's roughly "e iere metera hecate, phulakas ton akasik archeion, phrourei auton ten these." I know "Hecate" is a goddess, ton is either an article or a preposition, and "archeion" sounds like a volume or a record... Any help would be appreciated.

Wow... that was cockmastery at it's finest. You wonder why I AM a misanthrope...

Seriously, it was just a joke. I am not some ratty pimply-faced 400 pound teenager who dresses all in black and thinks I'm a witch because no one is ever nice to me and writes lousy poetry about it. What I hate is the fact that people make this world so crappy because they consistently forget they are not the only ones in it, and especially those people who belittle others to make themselves look good. People do suck. You seem to be one. That's too bad.

Hey, Helm, come on. don't be racist. Be more like me. I'm not racist. I hate everybody equally.

I can do an extremely good imitation of John Cleese...

however, the standard was kind of to keep only to one idea or action in the course of the one frame. It is a bit hard to progress a story at that slow a pace, so frames like Eggie's will be accepted: roughly what you might find in a half or quarter page of a comic book. Try to keep it down, though, so everyone has a part in shaping the story as it goes.

Oh, my... These quotes seem to be much better in context. That was the funniest story I think I've heard in....

Ã,  Well, I don't hear too many funny stories. Nevertheless... I must needs add a couple more of my own.

Ã,  Ã, In college, I had a friend who was, in a nutshell (heh... in a nutshell... there's another one)... a complete freakin' imbecile. I was tuning my guitar one day and the last string snapped. So, being a minor fool myself, I cried out in a crowded lunch hall for all to hear, "Dammit! My G-string!!!"
Ã,  Ã, Now, I said my friend was the freakin' imbecile in this case, right? Indeed. His reply was, "What's a G-spot?"

Ã,  Ã,  Furthermore, this same idiot friend, when taking some ignorant test in psychology class that lined you up with key characters from the Bible, made the most ruinous double entendre ever heard in public. I got Solomon, and so I said "Cool. I got Solomon. He was a wizard. I'm Solomon in a major way. I'm a big damn Solomon." This fool friend of mine looks at me and, once again within earshot of every living being on campus (about), says "I'm a big Peter!"

Ã,  Ã, Lastly, I once went to a renaissance faire with a couple girls and the guy running a game where you have to climb a rope bridge over a haystack asked one of the girls if they'd like to go for a roll in the hay.
Ã,  Ã, The worst part is, I didn't get that one at the time, and he'd MEANT it, not let it slip...

In a vain attempt to be cool, I used to say "this me" and "that me;" for example, if I needed a napkin at a restaurant I would look at the person closest to them and go "Napkin me..." That is, until the day me and my pal Tom were working on building a life-sized replica of a Dalek from Doctor Who in his basement (said project has since been utterly laid waste)... When I called out, "Hey Tom, screw me..."

...I have not said that ever since...

And, I must needs add, having looked into doing a screenplay myself... The Man doesn't want you to make the movie for them.. none of this "title card glides from left to right" or "Dave is wearing blah blah" or "he opens the microwave and there lies the hamster, looking like someone dropped a fatty deuce and nuked it for an hour..." All they want from you is story. This is why they hire graphical artists and costume designers and special effects guys... And if this is going to be a totally indie film anyway, you still don't need to do all that, because it just bogs down the script and makes it unreadable. When Drew Carey, of course playing the part of Bernard after having worked fourteen solid years on a weight loss program specifically tailored for his role in this film, tries performing his lines and says "Bernard walks across the... DAMMIT!" you know you have problems.
Ã,  Ã, But, with the criticism aside... I could help you write believable dialog, if you felt so inclined. My number one advice is, NEVER write the way it should be written. I mean, seriously, who says "Hello. My name is Callan Souza. I live in Tombstone, Arizona. My hobbies are writing, computers, and the supernatural." Hell, no, joker. "Hey, I'm Cal from Tombstone. I write stuff, and I fixÃ,  stuff, and if ghosts had asses, I might very well kick them." That's more like it...

Ã,  Ã, Here's one of my favorite examples of my dialog from one of my ESPER short stories:
Ã,  Ã, 
Ã,  Ã, Ian looked at the house. The damn thing looked back at him.
Ã,  Ã, "That was a wild ride," he said, not turning back to Rich as he spoke.
Ã,  Ã, "Yes. yes it was."
Ã,  Ã, "Abbreviate for once in your life, dude," Steve said. "what's wrong with 'yeah?'"
Ã,  Ã, "Shut up, morons." After a second of silence, Ian added, "What do you guys want to do?"
Ã,  Ã, "We've gotta go back in," Rich answered, and Steve gaped.
Ã,  Ã, "Dude, I'm totally not into that."
Ã,  Ã, "Into what?"
Ã,  Ã, "That masochistic stuff, dude. You want to get nibbled on, that's your own sick thing, but I'm out."
Ã,  Ã, "I said shut up." Ian was looking still at the house, but if there were eyes in the back of his head, they would have been boring into Steve and Rich right then.
Ã,  Ã, After a moment, Rich broke the imposed silence.
Ã,  Ã, "What do you want to do, boss?"
   There was another brief silence, and something akin to a smile flickered across Ian's previously stern features.
Ã,  Ã, "I say let's do the Time Warp again..."
Ã,  Ã, He could imagine the slight snicker on the face of both companions. Turning back to them at long last and finding his intuition to be correct, his first glance was not a kind one.
Ã,  Ã, "If either of you make a statement in any way hinting at my being a transvestite from Transexual, Transylvania, you will suffer most horribly."
Ã,  Ã, "Steve was thinking it," Rich blurted. Another angry stare came from Ian, and without another word the trio headed back to Montega Manor...

Ã,  Ã, Hope you enjoyed :DÃ,  Let me know if that's your thing, and I'll help polish the dialog.

No, seriously, I have to agree. The sprites look great, and the backgrounds look great. They just don't look great together, and light levels will only lessen the not-looking-so-great-togetherness thereof. Believe me, you have some beautiful backgrounds. So did I, but I chose to go with crappier looking 2D backgrounds for the sole reason that I can't render people. I knew this would be a problem from the first post, when you showed your beautiful backgrounds and said you had VGA sprites lined up. Don't jump down people's throats... Yes, he was a little rude, but even top-notch game professionals require criticism. In a less-rude manner, let me second what these others have said.

On a different note, the Serious Sam engine rendered these? These bg's look way better than even what the HalfLife Hammer engine can do. I use the free version of Caligari TrueSpace, but it's a bitticks to work with.

For form and function, I would agree with you on everything, but this is a game... All text is wearisome to gameplayers.

Hey.
  I noticed not everything in here was VISUAL art... There is some music, and the guy with the Maniac Mansion script, and a few people with game ideas. As anyone who played my game The Town on the Edge of Darkness knows, it's based on a short story I wrote of the same name (it comes packaged with later editions of the game file). That is, in turn, based on a novel I wrote about the ESPER society (Extraordinary Supernatural Phenomena Explored and Revealed). I have tried to get the book published. I AM a published author (if you don't believe me, go to Amazon.com and look up either Callan Souza or The Days of Old...), but for some reason publishers don't want ESPER, even though they accepted my lame fantasy story. NO ONE ELSE seems to want ESPER, either, which is a bummer since, IMHO, it is a hundred times better than my already published work, and would be much better received, especially since it is supernatural in nature and alot of todays' media entertainment is supernatural, paranormal, or occultic in nature (ie. the Ring, the Grudge, the Exorcist prequel, the Exorcism of Emily Rose, Dark Water, the Skeleton Key, Darkness... more horror movies are being made today than ever before, and they're SMART horror, not hack 'n' slashers like in the days of yore)...
   I think some of the major downfalls of the ESPER story are that it is written in first person perspective (I have actually come upon publishers and agents that would not accept any work if it were first person), and that it is action and visually oriented, which is difficult in a book. It is almost completely impossible to show someone being afflicted in such ways as hearing voices and seeing strange phenomena without it being in first person or having compelling audio and visuals to go along with it.
   So then, I came up with this idea... I would like to make a movie treatment, and possibly a script. I think ESPER would be much better accepted on film or television. You can get the story The Town on the Edge of Darkness from the current game download, and if you ask I will email you the full length ESPER novel, but here is where the "Critiquing" part of the critics lounge comes in...
   This is the story I would like to have scripted and made into an "introductory" movie to get the ESPER series off to a start. It is sort of a prequel, taking place before the events in the game or the novel, and is kind of unrelated.
 
   ---A sweet, beautiful young girl falls completely and madly in love with a dark, stolid man named Ian in an airport terminal. Understanding him to be more than the almost-frightening facade he puts up, she cannot help but see the selfless, gentlemanly individual she somehow knows he is. She falls so much for him, in fact, that she leaves her flight altogether and decides she wants to be with him. All seems well, for a while, until she sees he has some strange companions, and when she stumbles accidentally into his locked study, filled with books on the occult and newspaper clippings from a rash of ritual child abductions and slayings, the way she feels and the way things seem to be collide brutally in her mind. It is not until she finds out that he's one of the GOOD guys, and he met her while looking into the strange habits of her own brother, that she comes to trust him again; but how can one ever trust ANYTHING in this new world, unlike the one she had crafted for herself in her mind all these years, where horrible things like this can take place?

  Do you guys think this is a good enough story to start out the series with? Of course, if ESPER ever becomes popular, then, like Steven King as portrayed in Family Guy, I could write stories about haunted lampshades and have them be popular, but I seem to really like this particular story and wouldn't give up on it anyway.

And, if anyone is interested, would anyone want to work together with me writing my drafts into a workable script?

I use Dogwaffle for the primary art, Dogwaffle and GIMP for alot of the effects (notably the light diffusion, which is amongst my favorite of filters). I find that the graphics tablet is not as difficult to use as I was afraid it might be when I first got it.... I thought a tablet PC would be better, but those are hella expensive. Really, if you just look at the screen and let your hand work on the tablet, it's almost like you are working straight to paper... It's really nice...

he hasn't claimed it. Chances are, after Eggie said he was scrapping the first page, Bluke scrapped his.

The one thing I've learned in my years of gaming/moviegoing is this: game movies suck, and rarely if ever follow even remotely the original game.

::begins to shudder::

St..st..street f-f-f-ighter ::dies instantly of brain hemmhoraging::

bluke: you need to post a placeholder, or someone else is going to post your frame before you anyway.

I posted the new thread in the competition forums, with the first place being held for Eggie. But, since he was volunteered, if he doesn't post within twelve hours or says he doesn't want to do it, anyone can feel free to take the placeholding spot themselves.