Some music for general C+C

[SpacePirateCaine]

Hey there,

I was working on an entry for the September MAGS competition, but due to extraneous circumstances, I was unable to make the cut, as it were, but I still wanted to share something with the class (Albeit this has nothing to do with MAGS, and it's just an excuse, all things considered).

This tune here was an attempt at creating a piece of music combining a little bit of lounge music with a funkdafied breakbeat line thrown on top for good measure. I actually composed it quite a while ago, and this is an upgraded version of the original itself, but I thought I'd like to get some opinions, and perhaps criticism on the song from you folks here.

It's, for all intents and purposes, a theme for the comic series that I'm writing, and I have an intent to throw together an entire album, should I find the inspiration and have the ability.

It cuts off somewhat abruptly at the end of the track - it's intended to be part of a 'symphony' of sorts, so that is intentional, but otherwise, especially in the fields of balance and/or what-have-you, I'm wondering what I could do to turn this piece into something magnificent.

[n3tgraph]

Hey, disregarding that this is not my style of music, I must say it started off very interesting!

alas some crits:
the 3d sound (synth-organ?) is somewhat off, I think you should use a cool hammond organ for that (or something)

the drumbeat is totally not what I expected I expected a hip-hop sort of drums . This works good too, but I would lower the volume of the drums.

now that I'm ranting I might just as wel continue...
I think you should think of a sort of melody that goes over it all, with a flute or an analead or something. Because without a melody / solo-instrument the whole is becoming a bit repetitive after 2:30 minutes if you know what I mean.

Now I don't want to be putting it down only
I must say I love the Vintage Vinyl sound you got under there, and I must say the whole sounds very professional groove armada like

Now I don't have a lot of knowledge in this kind of music style, so what i just said might be bobbycock. Anyway that's what I think of it!

Keep it up!