Paintover time

[fred]

Here's a new end-game screen, shown if the player becomes a trader/merchant at the end of his sci-fi career.Ã, 



Here it is on a black bg, like in the game:
On black bg

Think I've come to the point where I need fresh eyes on it, and suggestions on how to improve it. Paintovers especially welcomeÃ, 

[Krysis]

Personally I think the image is extremely well done, the only thing is you say its for a merchant's career.  Does that mean a door-to-door salesman? If it does - you nailed it. And a great ending screen for a delivery boy, a door mechanic and a thief too.

[fred]

Thanks!

Heh - delivery boy  - I actually heard William Burroughs ended up totally possessed by his paranoia, living inside a safe crammed with guns ("prepared to use them!" too), don't know if he ordered pizzas, though.

Door mechanic  *LOL* I'm afraid the game, as of yet, doesn't afford that as a reasonable career path - don't know why I haven't thought of it...

The merchant/thief ambiguity is somewhat intentional, btw.

[Anghellic]

you could make the light's come out more. the rest looks really nice

[A�rendyll (formerly Yurina)]

One question: why the beams in front o fthe door?

~Yurina

[ManicMatt]

Looks like a safe to me.

[Afflict]

Everybody knows !!

Beams = Security



Looks like safe deffinately.
But like Relentless said the ending screen doesnt scream merchant.
But rather
a) let me sell you something
b) Pizza delivery for ... I C Wiener
c) Thief.

But more interesting carreers would be.. hehe

Barkeep
Junkman
miner
smuggler

That could be interesting, right?
"wink wink nudge nudge"

What do I know right 

[InCreator]

Nice BG but I think that lighting needs more work:

* The textures and ceiling is actually a bit dull and boring. Proper lighting would hide and/or improve it.

* The staircase is dark, therefore - it's dangerous. If someone plans lights, stairs are always lit so people see where to walk.

[fred]

So here's a new version.


On black bg

*Stairs have light.
*Brighter lights overall

I agree with the crits so far - I thought of different ways of depicting a merchant, and maybe this turned out wrong (since it doesn't read too clearly), but I still think the image is worth using - maybe I should just call this career path "Trader" - all the better if the image itself cries "Thief", in my opinion.

Yurina >> the beams are for ... security ... indeed... of some sort :-) Why, have you spotted a weakness in the system?

Anghellic/InCreator >> Does this fix the lights/texture problems in your opinions?

Afflict/Relentless >> The careers are hierarchically ordered so far, junkman being the lowest, then miner, smuggler, barkeep, merchant... and five more. Feel free to come up with more amazing career suggestions - I'm still happy anything I did could bring up the term "door mechanic" - cracks me upÃ, 

[UP]

Now I think the character is too dark, with such bright light sources right next to him.

[fred]

I don't mind the character being just a silhouette, but must agree it was less disturbing in the darker version. I made an in-between to keep some of the bright colors but dim the white lights.



On black bg

Do you like it?

[Afflict]

Yurina >> the beams are for ... security ... indeed... of some sort :-) Why, have you spotted a weakness in the system?

I see it too! That huge ventilation shaft right above him!

I think its sorted you can move along to the next one now.

[Evil]

The area that he is standing on seems to elevate as it moves from the stairs to the wall. This is very odd. I had to look twice because I couldn't figure it out. If you want to keep it, add a shadow to the edge, though I suggest remove it because the area below a "computer system" wouldn't be angled.

[ManicMatt]

Where? I don't see it?

[fred]

Ok, I'm about ready to move on to the next image :-)

Evil, do you mean the facing wall (metallic w/ bolts), or the ribbed wall below the white lamps? Or should I put a shadow where the top step of the stairs meets the floor?

The greys are very similar, especially the low wall that encases the stairs and the floor of the room. I made these edits, hopefully they make it more clear.


fix with black outline


fix with brightness adjustment of surface

Is this what you meant? - and which version is preferable?