BG c&c yo rly!

[He-Man]

Wow, this is getting quite good.
You've really done a good job Vict0r
One small thing: I think the writing on the box looks a little too drawn-with-a-mouse-like if you get my point. Especially on the big box. I don't know if you actually can fix this...
Anyway it's a small thing, other than that it looks great.

[Traveler]

vict0r,

Your last edit is a lot better than previous ones, but I agree with Andail, you should heed to more c&c. (Mine! Pick mine! Pick mine!   )

I think these would help a lot:
1. Move the largest box upwards a bit, so that it overlaps the matress corner. It would give a sense of depth to the room, because there the character would walk behind some things.

2. Try to fix the water spot on the ceiling like Andail did in his edit: lighten up the middle of the stain a bit (just a few shades, not more!), so the edge looks a bit darker. That would give it true water stain appearance.

3. The book on the box seems out of perspective. I may be wrong but it looks quite disturbing, as everything else has the right perspective.

4. Everything is neatly organized, something I cannot imagine right after moving in. Everything seems to be laid out in a neat, rectangular grid; every line is parallel or perpendicular. It would be nice to see some boxes a bit rotated, so that they're not so neatly placed.

5. The blanket is a great idea, it immediately gives a bit of personality to the room - it has the feel that someone is actually using this place.

6. Add a bit of detail to the door. Normal living room doors rarely look so flat. Even cheap places have some very minimal ornaments on doors. The door looks more like a closet door.

7. Shadows are waaay too weak for a single lightbulb. You should use stronger shadows.

Here is a quick (and inaccurate) paintover:



Changes:
* Added shadows for boxes, soda can, door frame (forgot door detail), bulb cable, door handle
* Changed water stain in corner, similar how Andail did in his paintover.

You'll have to redo this as I'm pretty sure it's out of perspective, I just quickly made this up. In my opinion, it would help if you added more accented shadows to other items as well: the matress, the plate, etc. You have only a single, very well-defined light source, since it's night outside, there cannot be any substantial light coming from the window.

[vict0r]

6. Add a bit of detail to the door. Normal living room doors rarely look so flat. Even cheap places have some very minimal ornaments on doors. The door looks more like a closet door.

Its the bedroom! Thats why the bed is there But thanks for the crits! Working on it now

[vict0r]

Did some changes! You probably see what What do you think?

[ThreeOhFour]

This is truly incredible!

This picture has changed so much from the beginning! I would just like to say its very encouraging (and inspiring) to see people willing to give such comprehensive and constructive criticism and paintovers. The backround has gone from bland to brilliant and is now (in my opinion) a very polished piece of art. Congratulations.