critic my character (new bad guy and front view boy of sprite)

mousemat · Tue 27/07/2004 08:52:29

this is my new character for The Items Collector

http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/girl_sprites.JPG

i think they dont look to good but i dont know whats wrong

mornin (away for quite a while) · Wed 28/07/2004 23:03:53

Hi,

they don't look so bad after all. With just a few edits, they could be really nice.
First, I'd suggest changing her pose a little. In the front view her arms don't move at all, while they swing quite wildly in the two side views. Then you should think about giving her some knees and stuff like that. Try to start with a basic sketch like that one:

First draw the basic lines in the right pose and then start adding 'flesh' to your sprite. So, keep on drawing.

mousemat · Thu 29/07/2004 11:01:11

Quote from: mornin on Wed 28/07/2004 23:03:53
Hi,

they don't look so bad after all. With just a few edits, they could be really nice.
First, I'd suggest changing her pose a little. In the front view her arms don't move at all, while they swing quite wildly in the two side views. Then you should think about giving her some knees and stuff like that. Try to start with a basic sketch like that one:

First draw the basic lines in the right pose and then start adding 'flesh' to your sprite. So, keep on drawing.

thanks i thought there was something missing .is it ok if i copy your manikin so i can use it as a guide

mornin (away for quite a while) · Thu 29/07/2004 13:10:54

Got it from the internet myself, but I think it's ok if you copy it.

Good luck!

mousemat · Fri 30/07/2004 09:26:37

i have updated a sprite

shortened face
lenghend hair
added joints to arms
added laces to shoes

Czar · Fri 30/07/2004 13:00:09

http://www.saveloomis.org/fun/52.htm

enjoy

mornin (away for quite a while) · Fri 30/07/2004 15:19:58

I think it's best to start with a normal side view of your character without any movement. Just let it stand. If that looks alright, then start to animate it. There are a lot of very good tutorials out there on how to make a walk cycle. For a start it might be easier to just use templates. There are some good ones here on the forum. Just do a paintover of them to get a sense of how a sprite should move. The more you practise, the better your own characters will look later. My advice, look at the link Czar posted to learn how to draw your sprite and then look for some templates of walk cycles and/or some turorials.

Good luck

Phemar · Fri 30/07/2004 17:00:53

I wouldn't say she was a woman if it wasn't for the long hair. Try adding some woman-like qualitys, like... boobs?

mousemat · Fri 30/07/2004 21:08:09

good ideas .i have read that link czar and it has helped a bit but i dont understand what its got to do with sprite makin.i am makin some feminin features soon.thanks for the advice mornin i am goin to the tutorials now.
once again thanks >>>>>the emotion says it all

Edit:

changed colour of t shirt
added boobs
turned jumper into t shirt
put hair accesory
Enjoy

mornin (away for quite a while) · Sat 31/07/2004 11:29:36

Quote from: mousemat on Fri 30/07/2004 21:08:09
good ideas .i have read that link czar and it has helped a bit but i dont understand what its got to do with sprite makin.

Well, there you can learn how to draw comic figures. I don't know if you recognized that there are more pages available at this site giving you detailed instructions on how to draw a comic figure. Since your sprite is supposed to look human and I guess a little cartoony, this site gives you everything you need to learn how to draw it properly. So have another look and don't forget:

mousemat · Sat 31/07/2004 21:24:07

i have read it and am drawing some characters based on the instructions.
i have also updated the swprite (just for fun) here it is

Mephistophilis · Sat 31/07/2004 21:36:18

Is her hand on the wrong way?

mousemat · Sat 31/07/2004 21:49:11

Er yer i couldnt make the bony bits on her hand so it looks the wrong way round. $:-\$

Mr Jake · Sat 31/07/2004 22:02:46

No, the thumb is on the wrong side. It should be facing downwards

mousemat · Sat 31/07/2004 22:06:24

Quote from: Hotspot on Sat 31/07/2004 22:02:46
No, the thumb is on the wrong side. It should be facing downwards

oh right thanks hotspot
next time i edit this sprite i will change the thumb position

v i will edit the brush size too
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Mr Jake · Sat 31/07/2004 22:11:29

K, I like the sprite, but maybe you should use a thiner brush for the outline?

Al_Ninio · Sat 31/07/2004 22:24:41

Hotspot, I don't believe they have brushes smaller than 1px.

Tiki · Sat 31/07/2004 23:00:27

Lots o' double pixels. Eek!

Mr Jake · Sat 31/07/2004 23:21:18

Sully me, didnt notice the new outline, I just scrolled up to check before I posted but saw the shading on the pants, I am any good at art but I might shade the pants tomorrow to see what I cant come up with, maybe give you some ideas.

Erwin_Br · Sun 01/08/2004 00:51:19

I can definitely see an improvement in that last image, though. Nice shoes and handbag!

Keep practicing, it's the only way

--Erwin