critic my character (new bad guy and front view boy of sprite)

mousemat · Sun 01/08/2004 08:53:25

I reckon that if i spend a nother day editing the sprite it will be ready but before that i need people to find out as many problems with as possible

Ozwalled · Sun 01/08/2004 09:29:45

LOVE the new sandals, and the far hand is remarkably improved from earlier incarnations.

The near hand is still a bit lacking though, IMO. First of all, it looks like it's swinging too unnaturally far back from at the wrist.... and it may look too wide...

She could maybe benefit from sone sort of eyebrow. It'd probably help bring out her eye more.

I also find that the hair accessory is weid-looking.... like an old pair of headphones or something, especilaly at a glance when I see her handbag (which makes me think "walkman" when I see the hair band).

All-in-all, not bad though. Keep up the good work!

mousemat · Sun 01/08/2004 17:31:54

next edit will be comming soon so i will changed the hand a bit and make her hair acessorie differentÃ,Â

Oliver · Sun 01/08/2004 18:03:42

also, the leg what's in the back is too out. Or are the pants so wide?
Just looks a little werid too me. Make the back leg better and then it's great!

mousemat · Sun 01/08/2004 18:12:04

thanks i need as many critics as posible . i didnt notice that part of the leg ,its probably the thick paintbrush.

mousemat · Mon 02/08/2004 09:51:29

heres my girl sprite from the front...it looks terible need critics fast!

thanks

Ozwalled · Mon 02/08/2004 23:50:20

Well, the biggestthing I'm seeing is that things aren't the same size from the side view to the front. If you're able to use layers, make a new layer that will be discarded later, so that you can make horizontal lines under and over key body and object parts that extend from the original sprite to the new one.

Just by eyeballing it though, I can see that the new sprite:

-needs a longer nose (maybe most important, as the nose seems to be one of the most distinguishing features of the side view... at least for me)
-should have her handbag crossing ABOVE where he boobs out to be
-you maybe should see her hair in the gaps beteween he body and her arm
-the handbagg itself needs to be bigger
-should be a bit shorter (even with the feet taken into consideration)
-eyes should be a pixel taller
-shading under the breasts would help
-And, of course, the hands need to be worked on, and shoes need to be added.

Also, insofar as the hair accessory (I can't remember what you call these types of ones... any help?...), I still don't like it (in either view, but less so in the side view). I'm thinking that it should extend downward less, as it'd get covered more by her hair or just stop. Considering that these things (the ones that I've seen) don't ususally sit on the head and extend lower than the ears, it looks funny to me, becauuse it's going well below her earline (remember that the tops of where the ears connect to the hear are about even with eye level).

Keep up the good work, though. I'm impressed bythe stried you're making and the effort you're making to follow advice given. Good stuff!

Czar · Tue 03/08/2004 20:10:47

Well, i can see the sprite is improving.

For more help on turning teh char look on Turn that char! on www.ilb.notrix.net

mousemat · Tue 03/08/2004 20:20:23

wow thanks czar that websites brill i will use those tecniques to redraw my front sprite also i will follow your critics ozwaled,and hope fully it should look 10 times better!

heres my new bad guy

copied it from the internet and need each frame seperate to use it in ags

Mephistophilis · Tue 03/08/2004 22:33:04

not the most consistent graphics style, and copying from the internet isn't the fairest idea.

mousemat · Tue 03/08/2004 22:39:43

yer well it did say you can copy at the top of the web page

Mephistophilis · Tue 03/08/2004 23:18:34

Doesn't that mean copy as in draw something using something else as a very close reference as opposed to just taking the original and using it yourself?

mousemat · Wed 04/08/2004 20:23:22

oh forget it i wont use it

watch this space for the new front veiw sprite comin soon

here it is

Mephistophilis · Wed 04/08/2004 20:43:16

she magically grows a few inches when she loks to her left.

jrl2222 · Wed 04/08/2004 21:24:31

Her hair grows longer too.

mousemat · Thu 05/08/2004 08:25:54

getting sorted now

edit:after more critics

auhsor · Thu 05/08/2004 14:51:45

My advice:

*Bend her right elbow on the side view.
*Reduce the size of the pants on the side view and make them larger/more consistent on the front view.
*Move her upper body (sholder + head) to the right.
*On the front view, make her left arm bend so it looks like she has an elbow
*And on the front view, make her a bit taller to make it consistent with her side view.

It's a nice sprite, and you have improved it greatly. I love the shoes and her bag. Her feet may be a little large too, but they look fine, but may need to be reduced if you change the size of her pants.

Good luck.

mousemat · Fri 06/08/2004 10:32:44

thanks auhsor
i will use that pic as a guide when i am remaking them

mousemat · Fri 06/08/2004 22:38:04

oops i did a bitmap

http://www.2dadventure.com/ags/edited.bmp
hope its not too big

JBiker51 · Fri 06/08/2004 22:44:08

You should've kept the enemy robot. It was truly amazing.