A draw from Lorena (Farl´s GF)

[Nacho]

Hey! As soon as I finish my Sept. exams I´ll help my gf to improve her art... But, for the moment, and seeying how good critics you make and how kind you´re, please, critisice her first pencil draw. It is supposed to be some kind of pirate harbour.

Please, don´t be rude with her, if you´ve got some oppened battle with me, don´t include her, thanks!

[agsking]

Very cool drawing. I really like it! One thing that bothers me is that box under the tower (do you see it?) it looks odd, like its a box floating in the air. This is very good for a first though. Great job.

[ravenfusion]

I like it too. *Copys it, shrinks it, colours it and puts it in his game without any credits given *.

[Evil]

I love it! I really do! Thats what I wanna see in a game! Despite perspective and sizing it is great! I wanna see more!...

[TheYak]

That box under the tower just needs some surfaces hidden.  I assume it's supposed to be "carved" from the wall but the whole scene is at an angle yet all inner surfaces of the box are shown.  

There are a few perspective issues but nothing that couldn't be added or changed as this seems to be a general sketch.  

I do like the style and even in the line-drawing you can sense a bit of atmosphere.  She's got a good eye for detail - I especially like the building to the left and the barrels.  The pic just needs a little more filling in and some minor corrections and it would make a great basis for a background.

[n3tgraph]

hey, the atmosphere is cool

anyway,
I like the way the basic is set up. She might look at that house with the pillars, because it looks like it's leaning backwards, but she'd become great assets to scoobar  8)

[Nacho]

Thank you guys.... the truth is that I didn´t realised some of the mistakes, like the "floating" box... I promise to show her the posts, and we will make the necessary improvements... I am really thinking in making a tutorial like the one Miez did "FoY" (Explendid... I have no words...)

But I want to say thanks specially for your kindness and good critizising. Specially for YakSplit, because nowadays we´ve having different oppinion about one subject in general thread. In spite of that, he is trying to help me and my girlfriend, thanks.

[Igor]

Very, very nice There's lots of interesting details on pic (especially crates, barrels, etc.).

In addition to what YakSpit already said:
My guess here is, that she started adding details right away. That's why pic lacks a bit of consistence. Usualy it's better to first sketch out the whole location (nothing fancy, just a few pencil strokes) and later, when the basics of pic are set, add details. This way it's much easier to work out composition.

Another useful thing would be varied outline  thickness- she's already doing that, but very randomly. It is recommended to use thicker line on the foreground objects or objects that are in focus and closer to viewer- it adds depth.

Anyway, really good effort! Looking forward to more