New Character - Need C&C

pixelcat · Thu 06/05/2004 21:22:33

I'm pretty happy with how my Roger sprite turned out, so I redid Bea in the same style. I can't seem to get the face right, so i'd appreciate any feedback, c&c... I notice that the right leg is a bit off as well, so i'll probably do a little more work on her.

C&C welcome... I put my photo reference in the image.

Damien · Thu 06/05/2004 21:28:20

Very good!

The left foot (her right) should a bit shorter, like the Roger's one.
Her bent arm seems a bit long, try moving her elbow a bit closer to the body.
Fix the fist on the other arm, it looks weird.

InCreator · Thu 06/05/2004 21:57:05

All I can say is that this is superb character... but her right hand is somewhat too unrelaxed. Like It's made of wood or something. Give it a little curve and less tension.
Same goes for fingers on right hand.

Phemar · Fri 07/05/2004 04:43:06

Brilliant! The only thing I'd crit on is that her right leg (my right) looks a a little knock-kneeed

DanClarke · Fri 07/05/2004 09:14:38

Really nice sprite, i could only suggest to rework the nose to make it a little 'softer' as it looks too defined at the moment.

Juza · Fri 07/05/2004 09:56:47

Very pro looking chars!! I'd very much like to see 'em animated!

Boy, that's a lot of work!

Igor · Fri 07/05/2004 10:35:56

First of all, i must say characters look stunning! And that close-up shot is superb too.

I think girl char is already perfect as it is, but since you were asking for feedback i did a small edit- especially on her face and legs that you said, you weren't completely satisfied with.
I'm posting 2 versions with different eyes.

ElectricMonk · Fri 07/05/2004 10:56:14

No offense, but I like the original eyes better - your first one looks like she has really bloodshot eyes, and the second one looks like she has no pupils.

Haddas · Fri 07/05/2004 10:59:36

I like Igors second edit. I can see the pupils clearly

Nacho · Fri 07/05/2004 11:36:23

Yup, she is looking to the right (her left) and that gives her a nice "nasty" feeling, imo...

ElectricMonk · Fri 07/05/2004 13:10:36

Ah, now I see what you mean... looked like shading at first to me.
In that case, I'd make the pupils just a tad darker.

Moox · Fri 07/05/2004 21:00:02

Nice Bea, her nose looks a liitle square other then that nice!

pixelcat · Fri 07/05/2004 22:12:12

Thanks for the comments/feedback everyone, looks like I have fewer things to fix than on my last sprite.

Damien/InCreator/ZorÂ©/Dan - Thanks for the C&C, I've been working on your suggestions and it looks much better.

Igor - Thanks for the edits, i'm a big fan of your work and really appreciate it. I like the second edit, looks similar to how I had her earlier... mine was a bit off though.

I'm working on my first background now, but once that's finished i'll be doing idle animations for them.

Thanks again.

pixelcat · Sat 08/05/2004 00:16:16

http://img64.photobucket.com/albums/v196/pixelcat/bea.gif

Made quite a few changes.

- Changed leg position, as suggested by quite a few.
- Modified the nose slightly.
- Altered the face/right hand, similar to Igor's edit.
- Fixed fist.
- Changed arm angle.

I'm really happy with how it turned out, though i'd still appreciate C&C. I'm going to finish my first BG, then i'll get started on animating (ug!).

DaniÃ«l Brooks · Sat 08/05/2004 11:41:58

i think i'm in love! great work!

Nacho · Sat 08/05/2004 13:52:32

Mmm... I know criticising an edit is quite annoying,

but I prefered the pose in the first one... It looks more aggressive, but I could be wrong, of course...

Hollister Man · Sat 08/05/2004 15:08:09

I like the new eyes a lot. On men, it looks cheezy to have the "whites of their eyes" showing, but on women, it makes their eyes appear bigger and more expressive, an in this case, she seems to be eyeing Roger. 8)

I'd fiddle with the arm again, it looks either too long, or too thin. Perhaps stick her hip out a bit?

cosmicr · Sun 09/05/2004 04:22:00

I reckon her boobs look a bit oddly shaped(too far apart, and too big) she looks older too, based on her figure. Also, when people put their hands on their hips, they usually lean towards the hand on their hip. It kinda looks like she's either leaning away, or tightening her belt or something. Otherwise, I like the shading.

pixelcat · Sun 09/05/2004 14:06:55

Thanks for the continued feedback, think I might change a few more things when I finish the BG i'm working on.

Igor · Sun 09/05/2004 17:51:08

Great edits! It's more or less perfect now.
If you'll bother with more fixes: i do think Cosmicr has a point about her posture. To solve this, not much would have to be changed- just make left (her right) leg completely stretched... similar as in your first version (right now it's a bit bent).
But i think no one will complain even if you'll leave it as it is

New Character - Need C&C

Juza