Electronic Music that Needs Workage

[rtf]

Workage.  It's the same as work, but it sounds better and with half the fat!

Anyway, I was messing around a bit, and I generated this little number here.

I'd appreciate some C&C.  Thanks.

[stuh505]

more buildup, evolution and progression

the first half sounds more techno and the second half suddenly switches over to sounding trance and the change is pretty abrupt

the pace is too fast for me

the reverberation is too long and is a bit painful, it sounds low-bitrate even though it's not

not bad for amateur practice though

[Problem]

It is quite good, I like the athmosphere. The overall sound could be improved, and as stuh505 said before, the changes are too abrupt and fast. It should develop more slowly with more subtle changes.