My first drawing!

[Paper Carnival]

This is the first time I post in Critics Lounge. The reason I do that is that I have a drawing I wanna show:



Yeah, yeah I know. It sucks, the lighting and shading is completely incorrect and it doesn't look very cartoony. I am sure if I drew that again I'd do that better. Well, I think it does have some good stuff in it but I need some constructive critisism...

I learnt some new tricks by expirementing a little and by reading some background tutorials but I didn't apply them to a full image. Maybe I'll try and redraw the above picture again and post it later...

Anyway, I used a combination of MSPaint, Pixia and Flash. I drew the basic outline with paint, then I put it in Pixa (which has layer support) and started the colouring. After that, I made the outline layer semi-transparent and imported it in Flash as one bitmap, where I drew the lines again (that's why they are so smooth.. was that a good idea?)

[12431]

well, if you're a newbie, I'd say it isn't that bad. I don't really understand what everything is, but i guess it's a road of some sort. it's good

[Paper Carnival]

no, it IS bad. I mean, look at the light source... It's on the top left corner, right? then why is the left side of the cliff so dark? does the lightsource darken it or something?  

Anyway, I thought you would want to see this:



It's the same picture, before I put it in Flash to redraw the outline... See how ugly it looks?

[DragonRose]

ARGH! FILTER INDUCED BLINDNESS!!!

Sorry.  I like the line art, it is quite nifty.  But just because you have all those nice filters doesn't mean you need to use them!

Solid grey would be fine for the road.  With that strange blurry filter it looks like a river.  If, on the other hand, it IS a river, it should be more blue and shouldn't just stop abruptly at the cave mouth.

The grass (?) around the edge doesn't need to be outlined.  Grass grows in patches, so there'd be some spots where you could see rock in the center of the green, and some splotches of green out on the rock seperate from the rest of the grass.

I like the composition, though, and your colour choices are nice.

[Andail]

I was gonna say lots of things but Dragonrose already covered that. Like so many times before.