First Character Critizise, Comment and suggestions

[Gazzo]

Hello!
I've just started to draw mi first character he is no special character I only want to know if the stile is nice, and what would you improve! THANKS!!! (sorry about my english)

and bigger


The kind of background i'm going to use will be like this...it's just a fast sketch to have an idea!

Pleas suggest and help me, it's my first atemp!
Thanx!!

[deadsuperhero]

Woah, for a first time sprite, that looks really good!

[Theeph]

Sprite reminds me of Squall from FFVIII. It's a really great achievement for a first sprite.

My thougts: The jacket is too small for the body (even though I realise it's faithful to the Squall's jacket, I always thought his was too small too.)

The pose of the arms is a little extreme, but I suppose it's context-specific. If he was standing in a doorway, yelling at people then it'd be fine. I wouldn't stand idle like that though.

I love the style though. Great use of shading, and the proportions are all really good.

Same with the background. In terms of the skill you've drawn it with, it's great.

Only thing that is letting you down with the background is that the perspective on the top left wall. Everything else is in keeping I think but that top edge... doesn't work. It's easy to fix though.

Here's an image that (hopefully) shows what the correct perspective should be. Bear in mind that I am only new to this to, so if someone more experienced contradicts me, listen to them. Anyway:




Also, it might not help in this background, but if you're doing some kind of detailing that is parallel to the top edge of whatever structure you are drawing (eg. the rows of bricks on a brick wall) then I've found this method helpful: You space out how much apart the bricks will be on one of the perspective lines and then use those as mini vanishing points. Check it out:




Hope it helps Keep up the good work

[Gazzo]

THANX for the advise, i know about the vanishing point our how you called it ( i know it in german ) i've learned it at school, but as I said it's just a sketch I didnt used any V:points, but thanx anyway!!!!!about the character, yes i know his pose is kinda weird hehe how could he stand ?
any suggestions, and here is a drawing of his face for the talking Idle ( I did the face before, therefor he wears different clothes, and the size isn't correct neither is the background)

Thnx

[Evil]

Neck is a little long. Eyes are a tad tall. The hairline on the left should come down further. Looks like he has no hair on the left side.

[Gazzo]

Thnx for the critics !
i did a fast improvement doing what you said...i didn't understand what you ment fist the eyes...
here it is!:

i did it fast on the PC i'm going to improve it on paper too, but is it now better?

[Evil]

Shortened the neck and eyes, and lowered the hair line on the left. Collar bone could be lower in mine.