My stories

Obi · Thu 30/08/2007 23:07:38

I would like critique for my stories of thrilling consequences of good.
http://rapidshare.com/files/52341405/billy.pdf

Neil Dnuma · Fri 31/08/2007 00:53:50

How much for the movie rights?

Obi · Sat 01/09/2007 09:41:19

Here is another of my amazing stories http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dgkbm6ch_3cswwpm

Ubel · Sat 01/09/2007 09:48:24

What's with all the ejaculating? o_o

I think the stories as they are have some interesting, surrealistic thoughts in them. You should keep an eye on the spelling though, for it's quite difficult to read occasionally.

Well done.

Obi · Sat 01/09/2007 09:56:36

Well you see I write these stories when I'm half asleep, so this is why I am unable to check the spelling. It being an art form the spelling mistakes make the story feel richer and more in depth.

Ubel · Sat 01/09/2007 10:09:02

I can understand that. All I'm saying is that if you really want to reach a wider audience with your writings I believe people would prefer clear, more easily readable text. But then again I guess by having this writing style your stories have that original interesting tone in them. In the end it's your call.

This is just my opinion and everyone else is obliged to disagree with me. Seriously though I'd love to see some more stories from you. They seem quite brilliant.

Obi · Sat 01/09/2007 10:59:35

~~WHAT?! Do you think this is the critics lounge or something how dare you!~~ Well I'm keeping them in an unedited form until I have enough of them to create my anthology of stupid, makes no sense stories.

Haddas · Sat 01/09/2007 11:08:31

I'm a big fan of your writing. In fact I check your blog frequently for updates. The stories are surreal and hilarious. I guess they're like you.

Obi · Sat 01/09/2007 11:17:09

Thanks Haddas, thanks. They should rename the Critics Lounge to the look how great I am lounge and give everyone free chocolate.