Crit on some music, please?

[Hammerite]

I've posted these on another forum before, just wondered what anyone here thought.

A Sunny Sky With Clouds On
1 Good Morning, Humanity
2 Scorched Maze
3 Lunar Eclipse
4 Mysterious Squares
5 Good Morning, Commuters
6 That Bread In My Teeth


Hither:
http://www.mediafire.com/?idtt18ty4df

Thanks! 

[Hammerite]

bump?

[twin-moon]

Well, allright; I've downloaded this, so I might as well make some comments on it. Just remember that sample-music really isn't my cup of tea.

Why don't I tell you my impressions while listening from beginning to end?

Good Morning, Humanity sound like a non-descript soundscape. Not memorable, but it sounds professional.

Scorched Maze has that great chimelike sample at the beginning, but it just drones on without much changes.  The very sudden harmony change at 1:49 is way too fast. I like the bit starting at 2:14. Also, the keyboard with the uncut stuff at the beginning sounds good.

Lunar Eclipse
That keyboardy sound which rises around 1:08 is very good. The drum/electronic bass sound gets really annoying after a while. I would add loads of bass to the bass, making it thicker, also I'd suggest making variations.
The ending (from 2:30) is magnificent. You have three sounds (low stringelike, high and something that sounds like doves) which complement each other. This is where I think the title is most appropriate.

Mysterious Squares
At 1:40-1:50: There's a sound which repeats itself a few times and then the rhythm changes. That transition sounds really awkward. If I had written that, I'd let the drums stop and have that keyboard sound echo or something.
That slowing down between 2:16 and 2:24 on the other hand is a good part.
Why is it called "Mysterious Squares"?

The way you establish rhtyhm in Good Morning, Commuters with that (slightly flanging) sound is pretty great. I like this better than number 1.

That Bread in my Teeth. I can't listen to this. That it's out of tune doesn't bother me, but that drum bit which starts on 00:52 sounds really out of rhythm.
And doubling the speed on the main sample; I don't get that.


A thought on the whole piece: I can tell you're in control of how things sound.

I don't think I'm part of your audience, so you might want to ignore this paragraph, but I think you'd benefit from using more melody.
Someone like Solex uses only a drumcomputer, a sampler and her voice to build songs and I like her music. To compare you two might be a stretch, but listen to All You Can Hear which is for free on her site, it might illustrate what I mean. The song is build on a few samples. (And I'm not connected to Solex in any way )

I hope it's clear what I meant with my comments, it's hard to describe sound, if not, ask away.

[Hammerite]

Thanks for that.
I'm trying out a lot at the moment and seeking to improve on what I've already made.