Probably main theme for my first project

[Grandy]

So I made another song. This is similar to the first one but more like well main theme than just random background music. This isn't ready yet so it is really short but I am going to make it longer. Well anyway tell me your opinion again.   

http://soundcloud.com/gr4ndy/project-main-theme-in-progress

Again inspired by m0ds and 6 Days A Stranger 

[AnasAbdin]

Well done Grandy.
I listened to the track late at night... yep: goosebumps indeed.
However there's something I can't put my hands on... I feel the key needs revision. The instruments are beautifully selected but I can't seem to digest the key used, what is it?
I'd recommend you listen to this -particularly at this time- in order to understand why I couldn't follow your choice of key.

In general, the track is awesome and serves its purpose!

[loominous]

One thing you could experiment with is dynamics, which makes things more organic, exciting, and less computery.

You do achieve a build up by adding on more instruments, like the timpani at around :16, but you could amplify this by changing the velocity/volume of the instruments over time. Suspense music utilizes build ups, and dynamics in general, perhaps more than any other music, so it could be well worth looking into.
Speaking of dynamics, it's very rare for (trained) instrumentalists to play notes at a constant velocity/volume, so you could also try varying the dynamics of the individual notes. One way to do this in more aggressive lines is to emphasize certain notes of a repeated sequence. A common one is where you have a loud first note, have the following be more quiet, the third a bit louder than the previous, the fourth a bit more quiet, and start over. So in the case of the timpani, you could have the first hit being at velocity 127, second at 85, third at 98, fourth at 85, and repeat. (if you use a tracker program, rather than a midi sequencer, 127 represents the max volume value, so the equivalent might be FF, or whatever the software uses).

I feel the key needs revision. The instruments are beautifully selected but I can't seem to digest the key used, what is it?

The key seems to be C#/Db minor, not sure what you mean by it needing to be revised. (to play it simply take a C#/Db minor chord, then regress the base note a half step at a time - it's a very common sequence)

[AnasAbdin]

The key seems to be C#/Db minor, not sure what you mean by it needing to be revised. (to play it simply take a C#/Db minor chord, then regress the base note a half step at a time - it's a very common sequence)

Thanks for pointing that out And your opinion above clearly reflects your good taste.
I guess I couldn't get around that musical piece because it's short and changed a lot in depth in such a short time. I agree with you about the build up phases to show more suspense.